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GA Review

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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 13:17, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I will take this review. Crisco 1492 (talk) 13:17, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

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Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. I'm pleased after my copyedit
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Good
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. See below
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). Good
2c. it contains no original research. Good
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. See below
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). See below
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. Good
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. Per definition
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. Checks out
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. Good
7. Overall assessment. Pending

Comments

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1b
  • The lede should better reflect the article, including the 1923 estimate and that the film has given rise to other works. Perhaps have two paragraphs for the lede, considering the length of the article.
2a
  • The pile up of references for "Most sources put the production year of this film at 1915 and consider A Free Ride to be the earliest surviving American hardcore pornographic film." looks awkward. Any way it could be merged into one reference, maybe through a footnote?
  • Also, publisher locations?
3a
  • I think a bit about the Oppenheim film should be added, at the very least the title and how it could not have any actors. (Is it worth an article?)
3b
  • I'm not sure the anecdote about de Renzy is entirely relevant.
6b
Hold for the relatively minor fixes above. Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:17, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]