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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
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I will get on with this now! --K. Peake 08:36, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Change Columbia Studio B to Columbia B in the infobox per the rules on the studio parameter
- "of the double album Blonde on Blonde, Dylan's seventh studio album, on June 20, 1966." → "of the double album and Dylan's seventh studio album, Blonde on Blonde (1966)." or something similar since the exact release date of the album is not notable
- Move the recording sentence to being the one after writing/production; follow it with the interpretation one
- Move the later inclusion to being after the total number of performances in the second para, followed finally by the cover version
- ""Absolutely Sweet Marie" was recorded at" → "It was recorded at"
- "Rolling Stone placed the track" → "Rolling Stone placed it" with the wikilink
- All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:09, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
Background and recording
[edit]- You need to add Robbie Robertson's guitar playing to prose to warrant keeping the image
- Used the Kooper image here instead, with some commentary. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
- Merge the first and second paras per the overly short size
- Where is the November 30 session sourced?
- Added Bjorner for 1965. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
- Add a comma after Al Kooper
- "session musicians including" → "session musicians, including"
- "Wayne Moss and Kenneth Buttrey," → "Wayne Moss, and Kenneth Buttrey," with the pipe
- "initially on February 14." → "initially on February 14, 1966."
- "during the tenth album session," → "during the 10th album session," per MOS:NUM
- "which was released on June 20, 1966." → "on June 20, 1966." because included was already used
- Move the last para of this section to being in comp instead since that is what it focuses on
- "makes the track work."" → "makes the track work"." per MOS:QUOTE
- Amended per the eight points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
Composition and lyrical interpretation
[edit]- Add the last para from the previous section at the start here; the instrumentation also should be mentioned in this section
- "that line does not appear" → "the line does not appear"
- "Journalist Paul Williams considered that" → "Journalist Paul Williams considers that"
- [8] should solely be invoked at the end of the sentence
- "and named "Absolutely Sweet Marie"" → "and names "Absolutely Sweet Marie""
- "fear of being misunderstood)."" → ""fear of being misunderstood)"." per MOS:QUOTE
- "from first to last."" → "from first to last"." per above
- Shouldn't you use the title rather than "Dylan's song"?
- "half sick/traffic" why is there a single quote mark to end this part but not one to start it?
- "out of key chord."" → "out of key chord"."
- Amended the article per the above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:14, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
Critical reception
[edit]- You should use a consistent past or present tense for the reviews here
- "highly distinctive rhythm."" → "highly distinctive rhythm"." per MOS:QUOTE
- "still felicitously possible."" → "still felicitously possible"." per above
- "The reviewer for" → "A reviewer for"
- "sparkling blues-rock guitar."" → "sparkling blues-rock guitar"."
- "Dylan said of the song" → "Dylan said of the song:"
Live performances and other releases
[edit]- Looks good!
Personnel
[edit]- Remove the img per MOS:IMAGERELEVANCE, especially when you have already used an image of another performer from this section
- Pipe Kenneth Buttrey to Kenny Buttrey
- Done. I've changed the source, and the credits per that source. Sanders (2020) seems to be the best available. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:00, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks decent at 39.8%
- Pipe Vanity Fair to Vanity Fair (magazine) on ref 7
- Add the work/website to ref 9
- Pipe Harper's to Harper's Magazine on ref 21
- Remove Downbeat from ref 22 and pipe Sun-Herald to The Sydney Morning Herald
- Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 26
- Wikilink Bowling Green State University Popular Press
- Pipe Carlton to Welbeck Publishing Group
- Wikilink Continuum International Publishing Group
- Wikilink Princeton University Press
- Wikilink Constable & Robinson
- Pipe Black Dog & Leventhal to Black Dog & Leventhal Publishers
- Pipe Bloomsbury Academic to Bloomsbury Publishing
- Wikilink New English Library
- Wikilink University of Illinois Press
- Wikilink Billboard Books per MOS:LINK2SECT
- Pop Matters → PopMatters with the wikilink
- Wikilink Omnibus Press
- All done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:24, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
External links
[edit]- Looks good!
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold until all of the issues are fixed, after a quick review! --K. Peake 09:42, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
- Many thanks, K. Peake. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:18, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
- BennyOnTheLoose You have not added the instrumentation from personnel to prose like I was intending you to do with the suggestion. --K. Peake 21:08, 28 November 2022 (UTC)
- Apologies, K. Peake. I've now added that in. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 10:13, 29 November 2022 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, this is laid out well after all! --K. Peake 11:37, 29 November 2022 (UTC)