Talk:Adventure Time (pilot)/GA1

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Reviewer: Khanassassin (talk · contribs) 12:41, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

Alrighty then, I'm taking a look at this article. --Khanassassin 12:41, 27 August 2013 (UTC)


  • ""Adventure Time" is the name of an animated short created by Pendleton Ward, as well as the pilot to the Cartoon Network series Adventure Time." => ""Adventure Time" is an animated short created by Pendleton Ward, as well as the pilot to Cartoon Network series of the same name." --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
  • "as of April 2008 the pilot had almost 3,000,000 views." Perhaps I'm wrong, but can "as of" and "had" really go together? Doesn't sound right to me. --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)


  • " Pen a kiss, which he enjoys but greatly embarrasses him." => " Pen a kiss; he enjoys, but is also greatly embarrassed." Something like that reads better, I think. --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)


  • "One of the main protagonists of the short." Not a big issue, but since there's only two protagonists in the short/series, Pen/Finn and Jake, shouldn't you write "one of two main protagonists"? --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
  • "The other main protagonists of the short." "Protagonists" should be singular, it's one dog. --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)


  • Not a single issue, just a personal preference: "Supervising producer of Adventure Time" instead of "Adventure Time's supervising producer". Just think it sounds better. :) --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

Release and reception

  • The "as of April 2008" thing again, like I said, maybe not an issue, just doesn't sound right to me. --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
  • "...if Ward could prove that the series "could prove the seven-minute short..."" "Prove" used twice. Reads a bit akward. :) --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
  • "However, the network was not happy with this story, and specifically asked for an episode that contained the same elements..." "Elements" sort of doesn't fit in the "what made it so special" sentence, lol. Just write "things" or something. Or don't, again, it's just a personal preference. :) --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

*""The Enchiridion,..." You forgot the second quote mark for the episode title. :) --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)


  • Seems legit.

External links

  • Either capitalize both "blogs", or keep both lowcap. :) --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

Don't see any more issues here. Fix these up and a promotion will come. :) --Khanassassin 13:17, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

I think I got everything. Thanks for reviewing this. BTW, I'll try to get your article reviewed tonight.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:42, 27 August 2013 (UTC)
You forgot a little of the "protagonists" thing, but it's cool, I fixed it. I give this articleof a notoriously overrated show (sorry)a Pass! :) Congrats, brotha. --Khanassassin 14:58, 27 August 2013 (UTC)