Talk:At Newport 1960/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Basilisk4u (talk · contribs) 05:29, 16 December 2011 (UTC)

Hey! I am going to review this article. Basilisk4u (talk) 05:29, 16 December 2011 (UTC)

Review

• The first thing that I notice about the article is there are very few citations: in the first three paragraphs of the "History, recording, and release" section, there are only two citations, with one of the paragraphs completely unsourced. This will need to be fixed before I can review the article further. I will give you seven days to add more citations, and then I will review it in more depth. Good luck!

how about now?--♫GoP♫_T^C_N 17:09, 28 December 2011 (UTC)

• Hi! I am soooo sorry for the delay. Overall, I think this article is really interesting, but it has a little work to do. The sourcing is pretty good now, but I would like to see some more sources for the dances he did in the third paragraph of History, recording, and release. Here are some prose issues I found:
  • No problem! :)

Lead

• "Water's powerful performances across Europe in the 50s and at Newport helped popularize blues to broader audience, especially to whites." - "powerful" seems a bit non-NPOV
  • Removed
• "The instrumental switch from semi-acoustic guitar to electric guitar on this concert was influential for later music" ---> "during this concert"
  • Done

History, recording, and release

• "After his debut album The Best of Muddy Waters, a greatest hits collection released in 1958, and Sings Big Bill Broonzy, a collection of covers of songs by blues musician Big Bill Broonzy" --> "After releasing his debut album The Best of Muddy Waters 1958), a greatest hits collection, and Sings Big Bill Broonzy (1960), a collection of covers of songs by blues musician Big Bill Broonzy..."
  • Done
• "increazingly" --> increasingly
  • Done
• "Occassionally there were uproars by about 300 drunken hipsters during Charles' performance." What did the hipsters do? I am intrigued. Go further in depth. Also "Occassionally" should be "Occasionally"
  • Done the last. I added a little bit more information. The hipsters attacked the policemen, this resulted to heavy riots.
• "When Waters and his band arrived on the scheduled day, they intended to drive back on the next day, until driver James Cotton saw John Lee Hooker standing at a corner. Cotton said he should get into his car and got the musicians out of harm's way." This is a bit strange. I do not see the connection between the two sentences.
  • I reworded the sencentences and added more information--♫GoP♫_T^C_N 17:07, 20 January 2012 (UTC)

Final concerns

Wow, thanks for your fast response! The only problem I have now is that the 2nd and 3rd paragraphs of "History, recording, and release" have a lot of details with no inline citations. Basilisk4u (talk) 19:23, 20 January 2012 (UTC)

References at the end of those paragraphs are the sources.--♫GoP♫_T^C_N 13:10, 21 January 2012 (UTC)

That works. I think it would be good to add some "ref name"s in the middle of the paragraph, but I think that is just my personal preference. I will pass the article now. Congrats! Basilisk4u (talk) 19:26, 21 January 2012 (UTC)