Talk:Ay mamá/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 22:34, 19 August 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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There isn't much to do outside of some copy tightening. 7-day hold to Kingsif. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:31, 19 August 2022 (UTC)

@Sammi Brie: Should all be done. Kingsif (talk) 23:44, 23 August 2022 (UTC)

Copy changes

Production and composition

• formed of use "composed of" (I hear conformada here)
• about women, but that no comma. User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences — There are a lot of these issues in the article, so it's worth reading over this.
• Wiwibloggs noted that "Ay mamá" has choral verses build into an electropop chorus, which they had previously described as Bandini's particular style, and something that is "anything but safe and lame" even within the context of the Eurovision Song Contest (ESC) Is there a verb that belongs before "something", or is the "something" the choral verses into a chorus (in which case the preceding comma must go)?
• ESC, and for wanting drop the comma

Reception and impact

• about Rocío Carrasco visiting the mansion of her late mother, Rocío Jurado maybe set this appositive off in dashes as it has a nested appositive?

Accolades

• Add a caption that is hidden. {{sronly}} This will show in screen readers and enable the table to meet MOS:DTAB. You don't need an exposed caption because of the immediately above section header.

Chart performance

Should the table in "Charts and certifications" move up here?

• After debuting in the top 100 in December 2021, it has spent 28 continuous weeks in the charts Update this.

Music video

• who Ribó chose to work with — should be "whom"
• While doing so, she notices a photo of her mother, and imagines herself embodying all women from prehistory to the far future, when women have four arms and fly. Drop the second comma
• At the end of the video, Ribó's son wakes in the music studio and she rushes to comfort him. Comma needed after "studio"
• removing the footage, and that he remove comma
• Sunyer says that they had been asked because some of the video ideas resembled Femen's protests and he did not want to be seen as plagiarising, but ultimately decided not to involve Femen as the group wanted artistic control of their appearance in it. Add a comma after protests" and "he" after "but" (to add a subject to the second half and make it a complete sentence)

Live performances

• consider taking part, but may wait drop this comma
• jury and the public, and receiving the most combined drop this comma
• Tanxugueiras to win, but felt very drop this comma

Other versions

• Add a comma after "March and May 2022"

Other items

• The Delacroix painting and Benidorm Fest stage image need alt text. The latter can be "Refer to caption".
• NFURs available for both non-free images. The other images are PD or freely licensed.
• References are archived.
• Cannot check Earwig (it's giving me a 502 error right now) but I assume it would be fairly low given that most of the sources are Spanish, Catalán, etc.

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