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Reviewer: Hi, I'm Mm40 (talk · contribs) and I'll be reviewing the article. My review will be up soon (I tend to be something of a pedant, so please forgive me). If you have any questions/concerns, put them here and I'll respond ASAP. Cheers, Mm40 (talk) 20:09, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

General
Lead
  • Anywhere you can link "Joker's Cards" to?
  • I suggest rewording "The album is their best critically received album so far." as "It is their best-received album so far."
  • "the revisit of the Dark Carnival concept" should be "the return to the Dark Carnival concept" or something similar; "revisit" and "of the" don't go together well
Production
  • "of Insane Clown Posse's discography up until the production of the" removes redundancy
  • remove the comma after "returned to Psychopathic Records"
  • I would add the place of recording after the date of recording
  • Link cannabis?
Music and lyrics
  • Unlink Dark Carnival in the section's first quote; I would normally be OK with it, but we should avoid linking words in quotes MOS:QUOTE and the term is linked in the lead.
  • I would remove the comma after "character within the Dark Carnival"
  • Do the two quotes at the end of the first paragraph belong here, in Production, or in Reception?
  • In the quote introducing Bang! Pow! Boom!, you say it's from the intro, but not which cover's intro (because it says all three have different ones)

I'll check the other sections, references, and images later. Mm40 (talk) 21:21, 28 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion
  • "was preceded a nationwide in-store tour" missing word?
  • link hidden track
Reception
  • "while also reiterating" "re" means for a second time; he hadn't iterated this point before
Personnel
  • Do you have a ref for this?
References
  • Sources seem to be reliable (some might not like the Myspace ref, but WP:SELFPUB makes it seem ok)
  • Publication dates and access dates are inconsistent; one is month day the other is day month. Be consistent (I would prefer month day because this is an American topic)
  • The access dates for refs 18 and 15 are different
Images
  • The album cover has a very nice fair-use rationale, so images are fine
Further improvement

Although these aren't necessary for GA, here are some suggestions for make the article even better.

Only a few fixes needed to achieve GA status, I'm putting this on hold for seven days to allow you to resolve these. Cheers, Mm40 (talk) 00:58, 29 November 2009 (UTC)[reply]