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GA Review

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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 12:04, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this article over the next couple of days. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 12:04, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Progression

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  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

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  • no dabs found by the tools;
  • ext links all work;
  • some images have alt text, but others don't per [3]. It is not a GA requirement, but you may consider adding it in if you get a chance;
  • the automated copyright tools are down at the moment, but I don't believe that there are any issues WRT copyright here. I have done some Google search spot checks throughout the article, and nothing came up that concerned me. AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  • generally looks quite good to me prose and MOS wise, but I have a couple of suggestions (below);
  • in the lead, the second sentence of the first paragraph is quite long and might be broken up: "The battle was fought between the..."
  • "The Korean War began in the early morning of 25 June 1950" - this might sound better as "The Korean War began early in the morning of 25 June 1950..."
  • not sure about this (and similar instances): "envisioned US 1st and 3rd Battalions, 187 RCT" - should it have a definate article (i.e. "the" in front of the unit?)
  • this doesn't quite make sense: "An unmanned SU-76 self-propelled gun was also found nearby, neither of which had any petrol" (neither of which implies two subjects, but the sentence only appears to have one);
  • "still well to the rear, 27th British Commonwealth Brigade " - might need "the" before "27th";
  • "line of march" - I wonder if this should be hyphenated. I'm not sure, to be honest;
  • "decimating ROK II Corps at the Onjong and encircling" (not sure about "the Onjong" here - maybe just "Onjong");
    • Removed "the" as it was a typo (and one I had repeated in two other GA articles without it being picked up!).
  • in the References, the Coulthard-Clark work probably needs an edition number - I think it is the 2nd edition, but I'm not sure?
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
  • Overall:
    a Pass/Fail: