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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:34, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I remember reading about this on the news back in the day. Never played Eve, but I love space MMOs and always wanted to play it! I'll have this finished soon. JAGUAR 21:34, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

≠===Initial comments===

"and was possibly the largest player versus player battle ever" - don't know if this is just me, but I thought that "ever" sounds a bit informal or unenecyclopedic to use. How about something like in history?
"Eve Online is a space game in which players engage" - needs mentioning that it is an MMORPG too; Eve Online is a MMORPG space game in which players engage
"and so deployed their entire Capital Fleet to the system" - should capital fleet be capitalised here? I could be wrong, so feel free to ignore this
"and the game's time dilation software kicked in" - informal, try initiated
"as the biggest and most expensive in EVE Online's history" - needs italicisation
"Dr. Eyjólfur Guðmundsson, an economist hired by CCP Games to oversee EVE Online's economy" - again, this needs to be italicised
"Pandemic Legion withdrew from the Southeast theater and struck a deal with the CFC" - bit informal, how about just made a deal
"Once the game went into downtime, developer CCP Games" - de-link CCP Games, as it already has been linked before
Ref 7 and ref 15 are both dead. Need archiving
No dab links

I'll leave this on hold until all of the above have been addressed. It was an interesting read! I wish I could get Eve Online. JAGUAR 17:59, 6 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I addressed all of these issues. Thanks!--3family6 (Talk to me | See what I have done) 02:17, 7 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! This looks good to go now.

JAGUAR 17:18, 7 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]