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GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 15:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will start this review soon! --K. Peake 15:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Pipe Tim Pagnotta to Sugarcult in the infobox
  • "by American band" → "by American supergroup" with the pipe
I don't know if this is necessary. Linking supergroup would create a sea of blue, and Dreamcar themselves does not refer to themselves as a supergroup, despite publications doing so.
It does make sense for avoiding that sea somewhat, but I removed the pipe in the body to avoid linking elsewhere. --K. Peake 16:36, 29 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Change debut album to debut studio album
  • Add the release year in brackets instead
  • Pipe Tim Pagnotta to Sugarcult
  • "written by the group's four members:" → "written by the group's four members"
  • "It was released" → "The song was released"
  • The sentence about the lyrical content should be after the ones about the comp and style of the song
  • "It is an upbeat" → "It is an" because the upbeat part is not notable when you mention the actual beat later on in the sentence
  • "it was compared and" → "the song was compared and"
  • "the group's previous single, "Kill for Candy" (2017)." → "Dreamcar's previous single "Kill for Candy"." with the pipe
  • Pipe music critics to Music journalism

Background and release

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  • "first studio album Dreamcar (2017)." → "first studio album Dreamcar."
  • "Kanal and Young, and" → "Kanal, and Young, while"
  • "doe the song," → "for the song,"
  • Are you sure the digital download and streaming release in various countries is backed up, as the only download retailer linked to is Amazon US since Spotify is streaming only?
I changed the region parameter to "United States" since there was no Apple Music single release, just a pre-order/download option on the album's Apple Music page.
  • "Dreamcar's second overall" → "Dreamcar's second one overall"
  • "It serves as the" → "It served as the"
  • "pre-ordered Dreamcar.[9][10] On the album, "Born to Lie" appears as the third song." → "pre-ordered the album.[9][10] On May 12, 2017, "Born to Lie" was included as the third song on Dreamcar."

Composition and lyrics

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  • Img looks good!
  • Swap the Mxdwn and COS refs to be in the same order as the prose
  • "which he said contradicted" → "which he said contradicts"
  • "He compared it to" → "He compared the former to"
  • "leaned more towards" → "leans more towards"
  • "than its predecessor." → "than the predecessor."
  • Wikilink bass guitar
  • Wikilink pre-chorus per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • Wikilink chord progressions per WP:NOPIPE
  • "sings in new style" → "sings in a new style"
  • "just a little"." → "just a little."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences

Critical reception

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  • Pipe music critics to Music journalism
  • "on "Born to Lie"." → "on the song." to avoid writing the title in both of the first two sentences
  • Avoid using "claimed" per WP:CLAIM
  • "performances provided "enough" → "performances provide "enough"

Track listing

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  • Good

Credits and personnel

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Release history

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  • The Digital download is not backed up as being various (see my earlier comment)

References

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  • Copyvio score looks amazing at 12.3%!!!
  • Regarding refs 4 and 5, shouldn't you add numerous Apple Music citations instead to verify a various release?
  • Mxdwn.com → mxdwn on ref 15
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Kyle Peake – thanks again for the review. I believe I edited the article accordingly and left a couple comments above. Let me know if there is anything else I can do, thanks. Carbrera (talk) 16:25, 29 March 2021 (UTC).[reply]
Carbrera  Pass now after I removed that one pipe for you; everything else looks good! --K. Peake 16:36, 29 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]