Talk:Bremer Marine Park/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 14:09, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello. I will be reviewing Bremer Marine Park for Good article status. I have created one good article myself: 2020 West Coast Eagles season, and I have three current good article nominations: Bayswater, Western Australia, Bedford, Western Australia and Collier Road. I plan on getting this review done within the next few days, and then have it on hold for up to seven days. Steelkamp (talk) 14:29, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Immediate failures

This article does not meet any of the five criteria for immediate failure. Having used Earwig's Copyvio Detector, I do not believe there are any copyright violations. Steelkamp (talk) 14:29, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria 1: Well written

Coordinates shouldn't be in the lead or in prose in general. It disrupts the flow of the text. In the infobox (or in a table) is fine. Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
I notice that the article sometimes says "Bremer Marine Park" and sometimes says "Bremer Bay Marine Park". Which one is correct. If they are both correct, then use "Bremer Marine Park" throughout the article (as it is the title), and mention "Bremer Bay Marine Park" in the first sentence. Example: Bremer Marine Park (also named Bremer Bay Marine Park) is a... Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Coral bleaching process, where zooxanthellae act are the algae – Is this a typo? Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

more to come

Criteria 2: Verifiable with no original research

I've added some citation needed tags for parts that need citations. Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
There are two different areas in the article. 4,472 km2 (1,727 sq mi) in the lead, and 0.4472 ha (1.105 acres) in the infobox. Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

more to come

Criteria 3: Broad in its coverage

Assessment of this criteria is to come. Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria 4: Neutral

Assessment of this criteria is to come. Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria 5: Stable

This article passes this criteria. Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria 6: Illustrated

Assessment of this criteria is to come. Steelkamp (talk) 16:01, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

On second thought, I am going to quick fail this article, due to it being a long way from meeting criteria 1 and 2. There are large parts where the grammar is poor, and there are words that are capitalised that shouldn't be. There are several sections that are too small, being just a sentence or two. These should either be expanded or merged into a larger section. There are 10 citation needed tags. I haven't done a thorough check on criteria 3, but I suspect the article may also be a long way from being broad in coverage. I also think there are too many images. There shouldn't be giant table in the middle of the article for just images. I wish you, or anyone else, the best in improving this article, and I hope it becomes a good article one day. Steelkamp (talk) 06:32, 24 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]