Talk:Cadillac, Michigan/GA1
GA Review
[edit]Hi there. Great work expanding this article! There are a few areas that need some work with citations and prose, many of which I tagged directly in the text. There are a few areas where I cannot find facts from the article in the source provided. Please check those as well. Other comments are outlined below.
General
[edit]- Make sure your section headings and order follow the guidelines at WP:USCITY.
- All ciatations should have titles, publishers and access dates. References 25 and 45 seem to have issues.
- You may want to remove the dead Wikilinks (also known as "red links"). Please see the editing guideline at Wikipedia:Red link.
Lead
[edit]- "Approximately five miles north-northwest of Cadillac lies the geographic center of Michigan." Subject/verb problems...five miles north-northwest doesn't "lie" anywhere. Better: "The geographic center of Michigan is approximately five miles north-northwest of Cadillac." Make sure to also translate mileage into km... you can do so using Template:Convert.
- "Cadillac became the county seat after the so-called "Battle of Manton," in which a show of force was involved in enforcing a controversial decision to move the county seat from Manton, Michigan." What kind of show of force? The lead is short enough that you can add additional details... I don't say this too often, but you can probably add an extra sentence or two to the lead so that it accurately summarizes the entire article.
History
[edit]- Battle of Manton: You could give a little more background here.
- Why were the residents feuding in the first place?
- If the dispute over the county seat was between Cadillac and Sherman, why was the sheriff from Manton involved?
- Sister cities:
- Flags aren't typically placed in the text. If you would like, you may certainly include another section with a list of Cadillac's sister cities.
- Why are the sister cities here? I think you mean to say that the city has a special relationship with towns in Scandinavia, since that's where a large portion of the town's population comes from. However, that information needs to be sourced and is better placed in the demographics section, not history.
- Why is the "Cadillac Club" important?
- The paragraphs about the economy and "Caberfae Ski Area" belong in the economy section or a new section on parks and recreation, not history.
- Why is that information about the gas station and the caged bear important?
- Neat info about Kiss
- The "Historic landmarks" section can be in it owns section.
Demographics
[edit]- The page cited is just a home page. Even if the data does come from the Census bureau, you have to provide a direct link to the specific piece of data. Even though the information is no-doubt correct, it's important to know exactly where the data comes from so that in the future it can be easily updated.
Colleges
[edit]- This section really should be about education in general, which includes K-12 schools.
Transportation
[edit]- The information about the trail might be best suited for another section about parks and recreation, where you can also include information about the skiing areas.
Local media
[edit]- Wikipedia tends to shy away from lists like this. Is there anything else notable that you can say about the media? How large is the circulation of The Cadillac News? How often does it run? Is it owned by a larger conglomerate or is it still independent? What major media market is the city a part of? (Nielsen data would work here).
Ok. Well the article is off to a great start, but is not quite up to GA standards yet. The article will fail for now, but I hope you can renominate once the issues above are resolved. Please let me know if I can help out. Best, epicAdam (talk) 19:48, 7 July 2008 (UTC)