Talk:Capture of Guam/GA1

GA Review

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GA review (see here for criteria) (see here for this contributor's history of GA reviews)

1. It is reasonably well written:

   Not Yet

   1. The sections should be split into smaller subsections to avoid the large blocks of text.
   2. "he was joined by three transport ships, the City of Peking, the City of Sydney, and the Australia..." - What were these ships transporting? Troops, I presume, but are there any numbers on how many of them and what kind of troops they were?
   3. Items should not be linked to more than two times in an article. Some links (such as Guam and the Charleston) appear too many times and should be removed. Dates should also not be linked.
   4. "As they were going below, Francisco Portusach sailed across the bow of the Charleston..." - This graph isn't written in a very professional format. The intermixed quotes and people interactions are not as relavent to the capture, anyway. See: WP:TONE
2. It is factually accurate and verifiable:

   Not Yet'

   1. The article relies almost entirely on one source. It will need to be more thoroughly referenced using the other book sources. Every specific date, quote, and number likely to be challenged should be cited. See: WP:MILMOS#CITE
   2. What makes ref #1 a reliable source? See: WP:MILMOS#SOURCES
   3. "Some thought the expedition was to hoist the American flag over the Caroline Islands and remain there until reinforcements arrived for a stronger descent upon Manila. Others guessed that the Charleston was sailing to some mysterious island of Spain, complete with impregnable fortifications, a formidable force of Spanish soldiers, and vast quantities of coal." - Both of these sentences need a ref.
   4. "...were shooting accurately enough to cause Captain Glass to smile pleasantly." - Also needs a ref.
   5. "The natives, seeing that the Spanish troops no longer had effective control over them..." - needs a ref
3. It is broad in its coverage:

   Pass No problems there.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy:

   Pass No problems there.

5. It is stable:

   Pass No problems there.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate:

   Not Yet

   1. The images should be dispersed throughout the article to avoid them being crammed into that small space. They should also be evenly distributed on the left and right sides of the page, again to make things look more even.
   2. The image captions should also relate more directly to the article.
7. Overall:

   On Hold while issues are dealt with. -—Ed!^(talk) 02:13, 17 July 2009 (UTC)

   It has been almost a month and the article has remained virtually untouched. Since there is a large backlog at GA, we can no longer wait for this article to be improved. It is being failed for GA criteria. Before it can be nominated again, these issues must be fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 02:03, 13 August 2009 (UTC)