Talk:Carrot and Stick/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:35, 28 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Just noticed, you use "episode" four times in four sentences in the opening para, which is a bit jarring.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"outside of the " literally no need for "of".
- Done though some Americans use it Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"1.16 million" non-breaking space here.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"by Chill Wills" citation?
- That's sourced from the end credits so no citation needed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Plot -> merge six short paras into three medium paras.
- ~~This necessary? Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)~~[reply]
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:42, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Canadian IDs" explain, were they passports, driving licenses, what?
- Canadian identification cards. No specifics. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"on the Sandpiper case" meaningless to most readers.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"led by the Cousins arrives" unclear.
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"the cold open and" what's that?
- Cold open = scene before title sequence Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Link short film.
- Isn't it self-explanatory? It would also make a sea of blue. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"the Kettlemans again." The" quotes are normally directly cited.
- Not if the cite is at the end of the next sentence, IIRC. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"performed a majority" the majority?
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
" double as" link?
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Mando image is crushing the refs on my screen, perhaps add {{clear}} before the ref section?
- Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"little bit." Nonetheless" ditto on direct quotes/ref.
- See above. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

That's it. It's a good piece of work. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:05, 12 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]