Talk:Cherokee Rose (The Walking Dead)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Glimmer721 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 4 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I will review shortly. Glimmer721 ^talk 20:44, 4 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks excellent, just a few comments:

"During a sequence in the episode, the survivors pull a disgruntled and bloated walker out of a water well, ultimately leading to the walker splitting apart. Greg Nicotero, the series' production designer, collaborated with KNB Efx Group in producing the scene. Principal photography for the sequence commenced over an approximate period of two days." Not quite sure if this is important enough to put in the lead (what about the other aspects of production?), but if you can justify it, please explain what a "walker" is to non-fans and the significance of KNB Efx Group. Is there a wikilink for that? The sentence also does not specify what sort of group it is, though I assume it has to do with production.
- Done KNB is a special effects company. They have a long partnership with Nicotero.
"Carl Grimes (Chandler Riggs) recovers from his operation..." Briefly explain what the operation was for/why for those who have not followed the series.
- Done
What's Sophia's relationship to Carl? (friend, girlfriend, etc...you can just put that before her name as you have done with "father" for Rick)
- Done
alright → all right
- Done
Plot summary: briefly explain what a "walker" is.
- Done
What is "That" referring to in the quote box? I would replace it with "[The episode]" if that is the case.
- 'That' refers to the typical sex scene in a television show, as opposed to the one in the episode (according to Kirkman).
Specify who is in the picture ("Nicotero (pictured) collaborated with...)
- Done
"Four takes were produced from that sequence." Should it be "of that sequence"?
- Done
The caption says the critics were divided about Maggie and Glenn's relationship, but in the section is says it was commended.
- Done

That's about it; I will put this on hold for 7 days while the above issues are addressed. Cheers! Glimmer721 ^talk 21:58, 4 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Should be all good now. :) —DAP388 (talk) 06:47, 5 February 2012‎ (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I will pass this now. Glimmer721 ^talk 17:31, 5 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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