Talk:Chiswick High Road/GA1
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Reviewer: Lectrician2 (talk · contribs) 17:49, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]The lead in itself is great, with no issue, but I am confused by the choice of image. As this is an article about the street, I would encourage you to add a photo that is more up-to-date, and show's the street in its current form. Preferably from the last 20 years at the most. Also, even though infoboxes are not required for a good article, I am curious why you would not use Template:Infobox street , as it easily organizes information. Many other roads which are good articles, like Japan National Route 119 have infoboxes. A much needed piece of info that I can not locate throughout this article is the distance the road traverses.
- I've replaced the lead image with a modern one, and put the historical one into 'History'; and added the road's length. As you say, infoboxes are optional; since you ask, I feel they take away from an article, taking up space, affecting the format, and more or less by definition not adding any information.
History
[edit]"In the English Civil War, the royalist forces under Prince Rupert, advancing on London from Oxford along the main road, were halted in a skirmish, the 1642 Battle of Turnham Green, by the forces of the Earl of Essex; the royalists withdrew, and never again threatened the capital." This is a run-on sentence that need's to be shortened, or divided up. "In November 1805, Captain John Richards Lapenotière" This does not specify what type of captain he was, unless you go to the link, which is not very convenient. I would suggest changing it to "Captain John Richards Lapenotière of the British Royal Navy". "He was later transported to Tasmania for forgery." is a sentence I feel should be re-aranged in order to tell why he was sent, and then say that he was sent. So I would instead write ""He was later convicted of forgery and sent to Tasmania." Other than that, great job!
- Split the long sentence, added and linked Royal Navy, and rearranged final sentence.
Street
[edit]"The street offers many restaurants, bars, and pubs; Time Out describes it as "an undeniably posh but very friendly bubble" As long as you add a tad bit more in the lead about restaurants, I see no reason to have this here, as you already talk a small bit about restaurants up in the lead, this only sentence adds about 25% more info it seems, so in interests of keeping it concise, just put it on the top. "The eastern tip of the common, where Heathfield Terrace joins the High Road, is marked by Chiswick War Memorial, built in 1921." Make it "is marked by the Chiswick War Memorial". I don't see a need for " It initially had iron railings.", as I don't feel it adds much. "into the Chiswick Cinema, with five screens and bar." I would like you to edit it to be "with five screens and a bar".
- We're not supposed to have anything in the lead that isn't in the body. Added the "the" and an "a" as requested, and removed the iron railings.
Conservation areas
[edit]No issues here.
- Noted.
Cycling and traffic
[edit]In the long term, I don't see "some traders state that it is affecting their business; some note that it has increased traffic congestion, journey times, and pollution; and others say that it is unsafe." really being needed. It doesn't offer very much useful info. You could simply just say "The lane had a mixed reception", and of course include the citations.
- Done.
Final Review
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
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2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). |
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2c. it contains no original research. |
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. |
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3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. |
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6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. |
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