Talk:Cornelia Sorabji/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:26, 9 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"change, and believing" split sentence here, too many run-ons.
20th Century -> 20th century
"born on 15 November 1866 in Nashik," infobox has slightly more refined place of birth.

Amended infobox as I couldn't find a reliable source for the more specific location. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:02, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Although "the Bombay Presidency" is only mentioned in the article and not the infobox.
"describing Parsi rituals" link.
"in England.[5][1] " ref order.
"for men.[8][5]" likewise.
"Sorabji got involved" got? Maybe "became"?
"the LLB examination" link here too.
"practising in Kolkata." wouldn't it have been Calcutta at the time?
"the British Raj, purdah for" link for both?
"for Indian Independence, relating" our article doesn't capitalise independence.
" Mahatma Gandhi's " no need to pipe link.
"early 20th Century" century.
"including the following.[14]" colon.
"Shubala - A Child" en-dash.
Any of those periodicals linkable?
First see also isn't really encyclopedically titled, just use the actual article title of List of first women lawyers and judges by nationality .
Ref 2, 6, 17: page ranges need en-dash.
Ref 12: year range needs en-dash.
A lot of external links there, anything which would be better incorporated in the aritlce?

I've removed a couple, plus taken out the multiple links to Sorabji's books from there. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:02, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:47, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks, The Rambling Man. I've acted on all of your review comments, and added a couple of notes above. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:02, 10 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]