Talk:Corry Tendeloo/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 12:38, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi! I will review this article due to the ongoing GAN backlog. I will start the review soon. Cheers, --Vacant0 (talk) 12:38, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Comments

General

• Change the short description: "20th-century Dutch politician who fought for equal rights for women" → "Dutch lawyer, feminist, and politician (1897–1956)
• Change the picture alt: "A black and white photograph of a woman" → "A black and white photograph of Corry Tendeloo"
• Caption can be changed to just "Tendeloo in 1926"
• Remove the parliamentarygroup parameters. I've never seen this being implemented in any article. My recommendation is to switch to the party parameter.

→ | party = {{ubl|[[Free-thinking Democratic League|VDB]] (until 1946)|[[Labour Party (Netherlands)|PvdA]] (after 1946)}}

• Remove the spouse parameter too.
• Add a comma here: "Born in the Dutch East Indies Tendeloo..." → Born in the Dutch East Indies, Tendeloo...
• Fix typo: tme → time
• Add another comma here: "In the 1930s she..." → In the 1930s, she...
• "on the Amsterdam City Council" → in the Amsterdam City Council
• Change the link for Suriname and Curacao since we are talking about 1948. Suriname → Surinam (Dutch colony), Curaçao → Curaçao and Dependencies.
• And another one: "In early 1955 she..." → In early 1955, she...
• Another one: "In 1919 she began..." → In 1919, she began...
• Remove accidental addition: "{" at the end of the "...in the Dutch Women's Council" sentence.
• Again: "In 1924 Tendeloo joined a law firm and in 1927 she began..." → In 1924, Tendeloo joined a law firm and in 1927, she began...
• Missing point at the end of the "Through their existence, they intended to affect change over three stages: from awareness to legal equality to practical equality" sentence.
• Remove automatically from the "...in 1946 she automatically became a member..." sentence. It is not needed.
• Capitalize COVID in the "Covid-19".
• More addition of commas after years.
• Copyvios unlikely.

Images

• All alright.

Sources

• All are alright, reliable and verifiable.

@Edwininlondon: On hold until these issues get fixed. --Vacant0 (talk) 17:30, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

@Vacant0: Thanks very much for your review. Much appreciated you taking the time. I believe I have addressed all your points, including extra commas after years. Edwininlondon (talk) 08:54, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

Good job. Promoting. Vacant0 (talk) 11:24, 7 January 2022 (UTC)