Talk:Cyclone Amara/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

UTC time this will be first GA review of 2014. YE time this will be final GA review of 2013. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Cyclone Amara brought stormy conditions to Rodrigues after passing near the island in December 2013." I'd axe "after passing near" part. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – The phrase suggested was axed. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"the depression was able to continue strengthening, reaching moderate tropical storm status on December 16 as it tracked southwest." links to tropical cyclone scales to "moderate tropical storm status" as the average American couch person will not now. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – 'Moderate tropical storm status' was linked to the suggested page. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"by December 23, Amara was determined to have degenerated into a remnant low." cut a few extra words here and revise it to "by December 23, Amara degenerated into a remnant low." Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – The suggested text was removed.

"by the Mauritius Meteorological Services" any shot at a link? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

✗ Not done – It wouldn't make any sense to link to Mauritius or World Meteorological Organization. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Heavy rains produced by Amara also triggered flooding in some locations and caused soil erosion." fantastic sentence, Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – Thanks. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

" Computer models" link to tropical cyclone forecast model here instead of "numerical weather prediction". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – Changed piped link. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Mauritius Meteorological Services" why no link and IIRC it is one s?

✗ Not done – 'Services' is officially plural, e.g. their website. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Météo-France" just abbreviate it "MFR" after the first usage in the MH, why aren't you doing this? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

✗ Not done – It was done as a stylistic decision. Unlike Japan Meteorological Agency, or Joint Typhoon Warning Center, Météo-France is a rather short term hooked together by a hyphen. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

" intense tropical cyclone" what's that? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – I'll assume you wanted me to link that, and as such, I did. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"maximum sustained winds" optional, but you could wikilink it FYI. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – Sounds good. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Due to Amara's projected path near Rodrigues, the Mauritius Meteorological Services issued a Class 1 warning" what's that? Any place you could link it? If no, put it in quotes. Deal or no deal? Ditto with the rest of the Wikipedia page. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – Not really a place I can link it, since Tropical cyclone warnings and watches ignores the SWIO. Not entirely sure if WP:MOS allows for quoting of terms like that, but I quoted it nonetheless.

"Other strong wind gust observations included a gust of 135 km/h (84 mph) at Sir Gaëtan Duval Airport and 133 km/h (83 mph) in Citronnelle.[39] " importance? I'd mention one of the two, but it's your call :P Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – Axed the report from Citronnelle but kept the airport's report. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Any records for Amara? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 06:19, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done – None that I was able to find. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:49, 1 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]