Talk:Dark Horse (George Harrison album)/GA1
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 04:14, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Lead should be expanded
- "in tatters," - this seems to be redundant
- "Harrison himself would remain an Apple artist until his EMI contract expired in January 1976," - What is Apple? I know it, but many won't probably
- "But as of early 1974, he still had no distributor lined up for either the Shankar Family & Friends album," - I would not start a sentence with "but", consider adding "however" after the date.
- "Plus, Harrison was working to seal" - plus is kind of colloquial, consider replacing with "Furthermore" or similar
- "Come 23 September, " - not sure what you mean
- "It's possible" - write it out
- "“Ring out the old, ring in the new”" - why italicized? And avoid curly quotations per MOS:QUOTEMARKS. I noticed you wrote in curly quotation marks, but you need to replace them with straight ones
- United Kingdom silver in "Shipments and sales" unsourced
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- I think it is fairly messy if you include a detailed referencing style all the time. How about adding a sepereated section with the full details, and then simply use a shorter style, eg "<ref>Leng, ''While My Guitar Gently Weeps: The Music of George Harrison'', p.200</ref> or maybe short footnotes. But it is up to you after all
- Use a consistent style throughout
- Bare urls should be fixed
- I strongly suggest to use the citation templates
- Don't forget the period behind p or pp
- "This was a very poor result for an artist of Harrison’s stature, and as an ex-Beatle, although Ringo Starr’s Beaucoups of Blues had similarly missed the cut in Britain back in 1970." looks like original research, maybe even a comment.
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall: I will give you 10 days to fix those issues. Overall an interesting article.--GoPTCN 05:06, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
- Fixed bare URLs. yeepsi (Time for a chat?) 10:55, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
- Just need to expand lead and find a ref for Silver, then prose should be done. Under what section is "Its possible"? yeepsi (Time for a chat?) 12:08, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
- I will pass this article. Nice work and collaboration! :)--GoPTCN 09:32, 23 June 2012 (UTC)
- Just need to expand lead and find a ref for Silver, then prose should be done. Under what section is "Its possible"? yeepsi (Time for a chat?) 12:08, 21 June 2012 (UTC)