Talk:Darvin Moon/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:42, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do the full review shortly. To start off, by chance I found a pretty sizeable issue:

The quote box and the ref don't match up; I read the reference but the quote's not in there. I distinctly remember Chad saying this though, so I'm sure a different ref could be found for that.
- I think that's in the All In Magazine article, and I probably just put the wrong ref tag. I won't be able to get my hands on that article until later tonight, but I'll address this issue as soon as I get it. — Hun ter Ka hn 19:58, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Actually, it turns out, the quote is on that USA Today source. If you click on the picture of Darvin Moon a little flash infobox comes up with that quote and some other stuff about Moon. Is using the source for this acceptable? — Hun ter Ka hn 14:48, 20 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - Ah, I didn't even realize you could click on the guys the first time. In that case that's alright. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:39, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Here's the rest of the review:

WP:LEAD feels a bit short. Expand if you can.
- I expanded it a bit, let me know if that's sufficient.
"Moon taught himself how to play poker, although he first started playing with his grandfather at a young age." The 'although' added in makes it feel kinda odd. i feel the two points could be combined together slightly better.
- I just changes it to "and". I think that does it, but let me know what you think. — Hun ter Ka hn 19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"He started playing around 2006..." Previous sentence then contradicts this one. maybe "started playing frequently" or something similar?
- Fixed. — Hun ter Ka hn 19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"After 18 hours of play, Moon ended up finishing second against Cada when his Q♦ J♦ succumbed to Cada's pocket nines" If you're using the suits for one hand the suits should be used for the other.
- Done. — Hun ter Ka hn 19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Storms Reback said Moon was "out of his league" at the tournament," since there's no wikilink for storms, a quick mention of who he is should be added.
- I mentioned that he was a writer for All In Magazine earlier in the article, so I thought it was covered. But I've added it again. — Hun ter Ka hn 19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - Somehow I missed that first one. In that case you can remove that second one, nevermind. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear}

I'll put the article on hold and pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 06:31, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 21:53, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]