Talk:Denmark at the 1964 Winter Olympics/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 03:25, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this one. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:25, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
- In the infobox, the website looks like it's in Danish. Is there supposed to be a separate link for the English website?
- You usually put the flag-bearer(s) in the infobox, right?
- Carlsen finished 53rd in the 30 kilometers race, and 57th in the 15 kilometers event. ==> Carlsen placed outside of the top 50 in both of his events. (it's too specific, as is)
  - Done all, regarding the link, there's a "UK" roundel in the top that changes it to English. Courcelles (talk) 14:49, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Background
- Good.
Cross-country skiing
- Instead of the current structure --- to create a better introduction --- I would suggest adding as the second sentence of the paragraph that: Carlsen competed in two races, both of which were won by Eero Mäntyranta of Finland.
- You can then abbreviate Eero Mäntyranta as Mäntyranta (or the winner, or the winning time, etc.) later in the paragraph.
- Carlsen ~~finished~~ completed the race in 1 hour and 20.7 seconds (to avoid re-use of finish/finishers/etc.)
  - All actioned. Courcelles (talk) 14:58, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Speed skating
- He ~~completes~~ completed the race (wrong tense)
  - Done. 14:58, 6 August 2018 (UTC)
- I would close the paragraph with a reference to this being one of Denmark's all-time best individual performances, with something like: "Nonetheless, this was Denmark's best performance in an individual event at the Winter Olympics until figure skater Michael Tyllesen also finished in ninth place at the 1998 Games."
- Here is the best reference I could find for that: https://books.google.com/books?id=uCN1CQAAQBAJ&pg=PA150&lpg=PA150&dq=kurt+stille+best+individual++winter+olympic+result+for+denmark+1964+9th+place&source=bl&ots=eOoHnu7htw&sig=h61GJcYlbBnCgD0xEH7MpxJSEVY&hl=en&sa=X&ved=2ahUKEwiY0qDXw9fcAhUBCTQIHZvmBhEQ6AEwCXoECAAQAQ#v=onepage&q=kurt%20stille%20best%20individual%20%20winter%20olympic%20result%20for%20denmark%201964%209th%20place&f=false.
  - I'm uncomfortable using a source I can't read (geographical restrictions), especially since they won a silver in 1998; if it didn't mention that, I question it a bit. Courcelles (talk) 14:55, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    - Okay, understood. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 16:16, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Overall
- No dab links.
- No plagiarism detected.
- All of the links work.

Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:48, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

- Actioned everything, except one point in speed skating. Courcelles (talk) 14:58, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Passed! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 16:16, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]