Talk:Devana Chasma

Hi Suhib,

I like the flow and content of your article.

The most substantial improvement I could think of is to work on the wording. It would be great to spend some time making your sentences a little more eloquent.

Your image is pretty basic, but does a nice job illustrating the concept.

Cheers,

Adam

Aturn4000 (talk)

2nd review from Erica Allen[edit]

Hey Suhib, You have added quite a good bit of information from the first review and your original image looks much better. Way to go! Here are some suggestions for improving your article:

Rift Development Section: What are the evidences concerning the development? The question was brought up and I am not sure I understand how it was answered in the paragraph, so some rewording on that would help me better understand.
One of your papers that has a link listed whether this rift zone was formed from a hotspot or a hotspot and lithospheric extension. I would clarify it and support it with maybe showing some structures like faults, scarps, ridges if you can. I think talking about these structures will add to the paper, and give you some cool images to show off.
It is really hard to see the regions on the image labeled as "Venus map w/ labels of regions" and you can increase the pixel size. Copy the code from one of my pictures if you want, then it may be able to be better seen. Since I can't really see it well, I am not sure how it is important to your article. You can even move the images around to the center of the paper, and I would move the original image to the center so it is focused within the article.

The only other suggestion is to have someone proofread the article for grammar and sentence flow. It won't take much and it will make it easier to read. I think it is a great topic and you have done a great job! Eblamble (talk) 05:25, 7 April 2014 (UTC) Erica[reply]