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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 20:21, 17 June 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks Hahc!--(CA)Giacobbe (talk) 20:38, 17 June 2012 (UTC)
First comments
[edit]Following, minor edits I made:
- Lead too long for a single paragraph. Split into three. (done)
- I uploaded the cover for the single.
- Fixed that charts section.
- Italized the album title on 'credits and personnel'
- Split the paragraph on 'reception', too long.
- Added quotation marks to "best rapping"
Comments
[edit]- Music video
- "Director DJ Scoob Doo revealed to MTV News" ... "In an interview with MTV News on May 31, 2011,"
- The first appearance of MTV News should be wikilinked, not the last. Also, it is mentioned twice too closely, creating a redundant use of the word. Finally, the second says "In an interview with" and the first "revealed to". Better if the order is swapped.
- "The video..." ... "The video was directed" >> "It was directed" (avoid redundancy)
- "The video additionally" >> "Additionally, the clip features..." or "Additionally, it features Minaj"
- "Minaj said that the video was a way of saying thanks to her fans" >> "Minaj stated the video was a gesture of gratitude to her fans" sounds better?
Nothing else to note by now. —Hahc21 02:16, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
- All have been completed, anything else?--(CA)Giacobbe (talk) 20:31, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
- No, nothing else.
Verdict
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—Hahc21 02:25, 19 June 2012 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.