Talk:Diosdado Macapagal/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Damiens.rf 19:18, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The "Publications" section could benefit from using reference-formating templates like {{cite book}}, and the isbn for those publications should be there.
There's not a valid justification for using the non-free image File:Dsdadomp.JPG.
The picture on section "Economy" is most likely a copyvio.
The picture on section "Sabah claim" is the repeated (but not cropped) infobox picture. That's annoying.
First reference is a dead link. --Damiens.rf 19:22, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The reference http://www.webcitation.org/5kwbNgZfa seems not to be working either.
There's at least one repeated link on the External Links section.
The last link, called "Images of Diosdado Macapagal" is a link to a personal website with a collection of copyright infringing pictures.
The most used reference, the one that backs up almost everything said on sections "Economy" and "Socio-economic program", is link to a tribute webpage. Too unreliable and non-neutral. --Damiens.rf 19:28, 28 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start shortly to remove infringing images and portions of text backed up by invalid sources. --Damiens.rf 16:03, 4 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It looks like most of the issues have been addressed. The writer hasn't really edited recently, so at this point it should be either passed or failed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:09, 2 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

It says "placed the claim in the back burner". The preposition is wrong, you don't place something *in* a back burner, you place it *on* a back burner. In any case, the phrase is jargon and obscure for some readers. I think the phrase should be removed and the text converted into plain english.
It says "Macapagal lost his first wife". Margaret Thatcher lost her son in the desert once but he was found again. Seriously, 'lost' is a euphemism (see Wikipedia:Words_to_avoid#Euphemisms). The article would be improved if it stated in plain English that she died.
It says "Legacy". The word 'legacy' means something that's been left. The section doesn't describe things that've been left, it describes things created afterwards.

Lightmouse (talk) 14:38, 2 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It's been a month and the concerns haven't been addressed above, plus the many bare URLs as refs remain. As a result, I will unfortunately have to fail this article as a GAN. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:34, 29 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]