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Reviewer: Someoneanother 12:00, 12 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]

OK, all internal and external links manually checked, article stability is fine, image rationales are fine, no problems with neutrality or the like. Some minor tweaks and we're outta here.

Lead

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  • There's a citation in the lead, which is not necessary, please relocate it to an appropriate place within the plot section.
  • "This episode takes place in the Fall of 2008, as TGS with Tracy Jordan, a fictitious sketch comedy series, is about to air its season premiere." - this isn't within the article itself, which is what the lead is supposed to be a distillation of, please either cover this within plot as well or move this over to plot.
  • Pornography and video game are wikilinked separately, we do have a Adult video game article though, or had you discounted it in favour of two links?

Plot

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  • "has been very successfully released since it was developed in "Cooter".[3]" - could you clarify that Cooter is an episode?

Production

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  • Listing the episodes Tina Fey has a writing credit for doesn't add anything to the article, particularly when Don Scardino's director credits are not listed when he's brought up immediately afterwards.
  • "Comedian actor Will Arnett reprised his role as Devon Banks" - IMHO '"comedian actor" seems wrong, would you consider replacing it with "Comedy actor" or "Comedian and actor"?
  • "Jack tells her that you can do anything if you walk with confidence," - this would be better either as a quote - "Jack tells her "you can do anything (etc)" , ". or changed to something along the lines of "jack tells her that she can do anything if she walks with confidence. A direct and accurate quote would be preferable.

That's it, the article is on hold. Someoneanother 12:36, 12 June 2010 (UTC)[reply]