Talk:Dornier Do Y/GA1
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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 02:04, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
Initial review
[edit]I plan to review this for GA class. This has been scanned and looks pretty good. Djmaschek (talk) 02:04, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
Review 1
[edit]@Sturmvogel 66: Please fix the following or argue your case to leave it as is. Aside from these comments, everything looks good for GA class. Djmaschek (talk) 04:23, 17 September 2023 (UTC)
- Description, paragraph 2: "two-bladed wooden propellers..." (The Specifications section states 3-bladed.)
- The first two have 2 bladed props, but the next pair have three-bladed ones. Clarified.
- Description, paragraph 2: "Ostric believes..." (Please use full name. Not everyone will open note 1 and read "Aviation historian Sime Ostric". For the main article, "Aviation historian Sime Ostric" would be nice.)
- Description, paragraph 3: While visualizing the armament layout, I got confused about "dorsal" (back, upper) and "ventral" (front, lower). It says twin-mounts in (1) upper nose and (2) between wing and tail, which are well-described, and a single ventral mount. Later, the observer is mentioned manning the "belly gun". Why not call it belly gun instead of ventral?
- Description, paragraph 4: "added to fuselage" (added to the fuselage)
- Operational history, paragraph 2: Earlier in the article, it refers to the "Do Ys". Then the form "Do Y's" is used. I understand that using "Do Yms" would be extremely awkward, and best avoided. I think there may be an exception for using apostrophe s after acronyms and jargon for plurals. If you can find the rule somewhere, let me know. Whatever form is used, it must be consistent. (Suggestion: Continue using "Do Ys" and when referring to Do Ym, use "The two Do Ym aircraft" or "Do Ym variants".)
Thanks for your review. I think that I've addressed all of your points.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:59, 20 September 2023 (UTC)
- @Sturmvogel 66: GA class. To make the form consistent, I edited Do Ys to Do Y's two times. Djmaschek (talk) 01:10, 29 September 2023 (UTC)