Talk:E. S. Brusky/GA1

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Nominator: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 17:27, 15 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Harper J. Cole (talk · contribs) 19:35, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this one. Harper J. Cole (talk) 19:35, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

who both immigrated from Poland As I understand it, one emigrates from a country and immigrates to a country, so "emigrated" here. I know the source uses "immigrated", but googling immigrate vs. emigrate does suggest "emigrated" is more standard.
- Done. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
started a small clinic You can wikilink clinic.
- Done. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
delivering babies, orthopedics and surgery I think that delivering babies is technically obstetrics. You could wikilink both that and orthopedics.
- Done. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
which included an x-ray machine You can wikilink x-ray machine.
- Done. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Brusky was embroiled in a small controversy I associate "embroiled" with something more serious than a small controversy. Also, I'm not sure we should say "small" at all unless the cited source use that word? Perhaps just "Brusky was involved in a controversy" and let the reader decide how big it was.
- Done. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It might be worth mentioning that Brusky and the president stated the controversy wasn't the cause of his retirement the next year, as sources 2 and 3 say this, and the reader may be wondering.
- Added. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
they had 13 children together I think they had 14, based on source 1. It says he will be missed by 13 children, but later states that a 14th preceded him.
- Done. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Source 6 isn't available in my region, and the archived url only shows the Chicago Tribune front page, rather than a specific article. Perhaps the original being unavailable to me is causing the problem with the archived version as well? Just check that you can see both versions; if so, no problem.
- Weird, it is still available to me. I removed the archive and added url-access = limited. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No problems otherwise. It's a short article, but the subject's role was less glamorous than most in franchise halls of fame, and you've given it a thorough treatment. Harper J. Cole (talk) 20:52, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Harper J. Cole for the review. All changes addressed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 23:06, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. I'm in the UK, which probably accounts for the access issues. I've checked 7 out of 8 citations, which I believe is fine for GA status. I'll promote now. Harper J. Cole (talk) 23:12, 1 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]