Talk:Erumbeeswarar Temple/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eric Corbett (talk · contribs) 20:55, 29 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments to follow over the next day or so, but here's a quick question. As there's no article on Erumbeeswarar Temple on Wikipedia, why is this article's title suffixed Thiruverumbur?

Thanks a lot for taking up the review. There is a Erumbeeswarar temple in Chennai, but it is a modern one and not as notable as this one. I can rename it to "Erumbeeswarar Temple" since the other one doesnt have an article.Ssriram mt (talk) 01:17, 30 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

You can and I think you should. If the other one ever does have an article you can sort it out between you then. Eric Corbett 01:39, 30 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"It is built on a 60-foot (18 m) hill and can be accessed by a flight of steps." "Can be" carries an implication that there are other, perhaps more convenient, ways of accessing the temple. If there aren't, then it would be better to just say that access is via a flight of steps.
"... while a hall and the temple tank are located at the basement". I have no idea what a temple tank is, in common with many of your readers I suspect. And "basement" to most of them means an area underneath their houses. Do you mean at the foot of the hill?
"... giving the name of the presiding deity, Erumbeeswarar" Who gave the name, what does the name mean, and what does it have to do with Shiva tilting his head?
"The temple has six daily rituals at various times from 5:30 am to 8:00 pm ...". Are these times in some way significant?
... and three yearly festivals on its calendar". What does "on its calendar" mean?

I'm afraid I'm going to have to close this review as not listed. This is nominally an article about a building, yet it tells me almost nothing about the building. What is it made of? How is it laid out? How many storeys? The article is also in desperate need of a copyedit by a native English speaker, which maybe the WP:GOCE could help with. Eric Corbett 00:15, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

GA comments

There are certain features associated with the temple and if it is reviewed as yet another building, it may not give a satisfactory read. The major idea is to cover the historical aspects, legend associated and also the worship practices followed. It is not listed in the architectural section, but under religion and philosophy - so i am a bit reluctant to expand on intricacies of architecture as it will create an imbalance. IMO all the individual shrines present, walls around the precincts and material used (granite) are covered. I will work on the copy-editing part to improve it further. The timing of the rituals and date of festivals are important aspects of the temple. Ssriram mt (talk) 02:57, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Where you listed it at GAN is neither here nor there. You have to accept that this is an article about a building. If you want it to be about something else then you need to focus it appropriately, and rename it. Eric Corbett 03:37, 31 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]