Talk:Evermore (song)/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 20:49, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 20:49, 9 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

I think the second sentence of the lead can be separated into two, with one sentence on Stevens and the other on Groban to avoid the sentence from running too long.

Hmmmm I'm gonna have to fight for this one a little..."Originally recorded for the film by English actor Dan Stevens, who performs the song in his starring role as the titular Beast, "Evermore" was first released as a single by American singer Josh Groban on March 3, 2017." The sentence is structured in a way that smoothly indicates that Groban's version was released as a single before Stevens'; the general idea is stated without having to break it up into two sentences, which would result in something clunkier/a little more more segmented and redundant like "'Evermore' was originally recorded for the film by English actor Dan Stevens, who performs the song in his starring role as the titular Beast. 'Evermore' was first released as a single by American singer Josh Groban..." see what I mean? Let me know what you think :-)--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:00, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for clarifying this, and I agree with you. Aoba47 (talk) 14:24, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I do not believe “eventually” in “eventually made available to the public” since you give an exact date in the sentence.

Fixed, "Eventually" removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:10, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Please put the premiere dates in parenthesis by Les Misérables and The Phantom of the Opera.

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:10, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I do not believe that the transition “while” is appropriate in the last sentence of the lead’s last paragraph as it implies that you are contrasting two different ideas and I do not think that the critics’ recognition of Stevens as a strong vocalist and the song’s award potential counts as a contrast.

Understood. "While" simply removed, sentence still reads fine.--Changedforbetter (talk) 05:10, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Unlink The Hunchback of Notre Dame after the first mention.

Done, unlinked (and premiere date also removed) in Composition section.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:18, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Something seems incorrect in Reference 94 (i.e. “illegal name entered”).

This one gave me a headache, lol. After numerous attempts, I've determined that there's actually nothing wrong with the way in which I (or the editor who originally contributed the chart) cited the reference; it matches the template exactly. And since the error isn't in bold red text appearing after the reference, I believe this is not an editor issue but rather something to do with a discrepancy between the Single chart template and the URL that is automatically set to provide the chart information. It's very complicated to explain, but essentially this is something only time can resolve at this point; hopefully a bot will pick up on it soon.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:17, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I had a feeling that this was the case, but I just wanted to make sure. Hopefully, it will be fixed in the future, but it should be fine for now. Aoba47 (talk) 14:24, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Avoid shouting in the reference titles (putting parts of the title for the references in all capital letters). See Reference 65 and Reference 105 as examples of this.

Resolved, these were the only two instances I could find.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:17, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I believe you should add a short part to the “Release and reception” section on the song’s commercial performance (as I believe there has to be a prose component to the chart); that way you can also mention the amount of weeks that the song appeared on the chart or any other relevant information about the song’s appearance on the chart.

Done, brief paragraph added to the Chart performance section stating the length of time spent on the charts, as well as the peak date.

Please add the release dates for “When She Loves Me” and “You’ll Be in My Heart” and for the films Toy Story 2 and Tarzan.

Done - "both of which were released in 1999"--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:45, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

In the References, there are some things that should not be in italics (i.e. iTunes, Comicbook.com, Vulture.com, MTV). Please double-check the work/publisher stuff with this in mind.

Instances I could find have been repaired.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:45, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Final comment

Wonderful work on this as always. I only find relatively minor notes for this. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 00:57, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have addressed all your comments, awaiting your final verdict. Thanks again for reviewing yet another one of my articles, I feel as though I should be paying you at this point lol.--Changedforbetter (talk) 06:45, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for reviewing my comments. It is always a pleasure to work with you and you have done excellent work with this. It was a very interesting read. I can definitely ✓ Pass it. Good luck with your future work and I look forward to working with you further in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 14:24, 10 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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