Talk:FTC v. Microsoft/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: ElijahPepe (talk · contribs) 04:56, 24 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Shushugah (talk · contribs) 20:34, 19 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Summary

Generally very well written and almost a GA already. Below are some nitpicks and indications of a thorough check. I would also be grateful if you'd be willing to review Microsoft and unions an article with overlap in topic but distinct enough still.

Y All images are permissably licensed, as they're WP:Public Domain (needs improved labels)

I spot checked the following sources and will continue to look further as you make improvements:

Y ^[1]
Y ^[2]
? This is an imprecise summary. It says that Sony (Playstation) won't have access to Elder Scrolls, but that doesn't mean it will be exclusively available on Xbox.^[3]

Changes required

ended it if granted -> would halt the acquisition if granted
filed against the company -> against Activision Blizzard
are scheduled for December 2023 -> What happened in December? This is past tense so needs updating
criticized Khan -> criticized FTC Chair Lina Khan
Judges Daniel P. Collins, Danielle J. Forrest, and Jennifer Sung are depicted, but no context is provided that they are the judges of the United States Court of Appeals for the Ninth Circuit in either image labels or the body of articles.
(Re)move WP:CRUFT e.g this passage does not add anything directly in the paragraph:
- Documents submitted by Sony appeared to have been redacted using a black Sharpie but, upon being scanned in, the redacted figures were legible. The documents show that Horizon Forbidden West (2022) cost US$212 million over five years with 300 employees while The Last of Us Part II (2020) cost US$220 million with 200 employees.
Added categories
- Category:United States Court of Appeals for the Ninth Circuit cases
- Category:Federal Trade Commission litigation

Document leak

The lede wording is very confusing. It feels both undue to mention the leak, and even if due, the wording is unclear about the fact that the Xbox designs were accidentally uploaded. In the section about Document leak itself, please expand on significant and commentary that ensued afterwards. Also include full date years. September in what year?

References

^ Roth, Emma (2022-02-09). "Microsoft says it will keep Call of Duty on PlayStation 'beyond the existing agreement'". The Verge. Retrieved 2024-08-19.
^ Kang, Cecilia (2023-07-12). "F.T.C.'s Court Loss Raises Fresh Questions About Its Chair's Strategy". The New York Times. ISSN 0362-4331. Retrieved 2024-08-19.
^ Collier, Kevin (September 19, 2023). "Microsoft's Xbox plans revealed in emails tied to FTC case". NBC News. Archived from the original on September 19, 2023. Retrieved September 19, 2023.

[1] Roth, Emma (2022-02-09). "Microsoft says it will keep Call of Duty on PlayStation 'beyond the existing agreement'". The Verge. Retrieved 2024-08-19.

[2] Kang, Cecilia (2023-07-12). "F.T.C.'s Court Loss Raises Fresh Questions About Its Chair's Strategy". The New York Times. ISSN 0362-4331. Retrieved 2024-08-19.

[3] Collier, Kevin (September 19, 2023). "Microsoft's Xbox plans revealed in emails tied to FTC case". NBC News. Archived from the original on September 19, 2023. Retrieved September 19, 2023.

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