Talk:Fernando Alonso/GA1
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Reviewer: Mark83 (talk · contribs) 13:32, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
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[edit]Did you also review the page Motor racing career of Fernando Alonso? That page contains, what you called "controversial issues" with much more details about for example the espionage scandal and the Honda board radio's. That page is created with information that was originally on this main page. Also on this page under "Image and impact" his nature is described.Lobo151 (talk) 09:18, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
- No, because the GA nomination is about this article. It's a stunning omission to not adequately summarise "spygate" and the events in Hungary in this article. And the "image and impact" section (in my opinion) doesn't go into sufficient detail on the reputation he has of being 'prickly'. Happy to debate this second point however (and contribute to researching this). Mark83 (talk) 11:54, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
- I've had a look, and I don't believe that even that article adequately covers Alonso's impact on the Honda relationship. "Radio complaints" are mentioned, but it's more significant than that, e.g. "Relations between the team and Honda have been strained ever since the under-developed power unit's woeful performance throughout 2015, when Alonso deliberately called it a "GP2 engine" over the radio in Honda's home race." [Tremayne, David (28 May, 2017). Button's dream F1 return turns to nightmare. The Independent] Mark83 (talk) 12:10, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
- I understand the point about the espionage scandal. But the events of the Hugarian are mentioned. What more detailes are needed? and the flare-up during qualifying for the Hungarian Grand Prix when Hamilton disobeyed a team instruction, thus disadvantaging Alonso, and Alonso responded by delaying Hamilton in the pit lane. That is what happened, what more need to be added to it?Lobo151 (talk) 12:18, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
- This article from Andrew Benson (BBC) provides a good summary of Alonso's actions at that Grand Prix. It's a long and complex article, but our article does not adquately summarise some crucial events, e.g. threatening his team boss and insisting that McLaren make Hamilton run out of fuel in the race. Mark83 (talk) 12:36, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
- I understand the point about the espionage scandal. But the events of the Hugarian are mentioned. What more detailes are needed? and the flare-up during qualifying for the Hungarian Grand Prix when Hamilton disobeyed a team instruction, thus disadvantaging Alonso, and Alonso responded by delaying Hamilton in the pit lane. That is what happened, what more need to be added to it?Lobo151 (talk) 12:18, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | The main rationale for the fail. A lot of issues - grammar mistakes and prose not clear. Examples:
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
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2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | Not reviewed due to the improvements required on the other criteria. | |
2c. it contains no original research. |
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2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | Checked with Earwig's Copyvio Detector, no concerns. | |
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | Nothing covered in too much detail. Quite the reverse (see 3a). | |
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | On the fence on this one. I think the omissions about Alonso's 'prickly' nature and his role in the espionage scandal/Hungarian Grand Prix are (inadvertently) glossing over important issues. | |
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | Stable. | |
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | Not reviewed due to the improvements required on the other criteria. | |
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | Not reviewed due to the improvements required on the other criteria. | |
7. Overall assessment. | Major review and improvement of prose required. Along with inclusion of the more controversial issues/events in Alonso's F1 career. However this is a strong article and these fixes are achievable to raise it to GA standard. For the prose issue, consider asking for assistance as I know how it can be difficult to review this sometimes when you are so close to the content. |