Talk:Five Nights at Freddy's 3/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 13:54, 28 October 2023 (UTC)
I remember these being in vogue while I was at college! ♦ jaguar 13:54, 28 October 2023 (UTC)
- Lead
- " in a horror-themed attraction based on the chain of restaurants" - condense to restaurant chains
- Done, though I made it just "chain".
- "the player must monitor the attractions security cameras" - missing apostrophe?
- Looks like someone else did this.
- "A third entry in the Five Nights at Freddy's series was first confirmed in January 2015" - perhaps revealed is a better word choice
- Done.
- "with praise towards the reworked mechanics and gameplay from previous entries" - redundant phrasing
- Fixed.
- "The fourth game in the series, Five Nights at Freddy's 4," - replace with Its successor
- Done.
- "alongside the first, second, and fourth game's in the series." - incorrect apostrophe, regardless I would consider replacing this with instalments
- Done.
- Body
- "... at a soon-to-open horror attraction" - link Haunted attraction (simulated)
- Done.
- "the player will be jumpscared and one of the systems will fail" - link jump scare for those unfortunate enough not to have fallen prey
- Done.
- "an opinion concurred Rowen and Vogel" - missing word
- Fixed.
- "The game's narrative and minigame's were also discussed" - discussed is a weak word; consider Critics were divided over the game's narrative and minigames
- Done.
Overall this is a decent, compact article with not much standing in its way. I'll leave it on hold for now. ♦ jaguar 14:05, 28 October 2023 (UTC)
- Hi, thanks for reviewing both this and Hotline Miami 2. I believe I have addressed all of the above concerns. NegativeMP1 15:11, 28 October 2023 (UTC)
- No problem, I'm happy to promote this. ♦ jaguar 18:23, 28 October 2023 (UTC)