Talk:Frontier Central School District/GA1
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:09, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
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[edit], however after 1972 district enrollment began declining
— change the comma to a semicolon, add a comma after "however", and move "after 1972" to the end of this block
- Done
document storage,
— remove comma
- Done
The school offers over two dozen clubs and activities, over 64 varsity sports teams, and began operating a student-run food truck in 2019
— Change the first comma to an "and" and remove the second.
- Done
The first expansion was in 1993...
— Remove the comma after "gymnasium", as "the second in 1998" is not a complete sentence. A ", and" joins two sentences that would otherwise stand alone.
- Good to know, thank you
all students living within 15 miles (24 km) of the school that they attend
— unsure what is meant here, there's a missing verb
- I looked at the district policy again, and it doesn't make sense to me what they're saying. So I removed it.
Other notes
[edit]- Almost all the references are archived. Consider running IABot again for the rest (presumably these were added after or missed by the bot itself, which I know to happen).
- For some reason the bot isn't working, but I'll go back and try something else
- I'm left wondering if listing the current principal of each school might be the one place where this gets too detailed? (Certainly the assistant principals are too much!) The by-school summaries are good otherwise. Since it's been a while since you worked on this, it might be worth giving a once-over to find any other elements that could be cruft.
- I removed them as it get repetitive
- Copyvio tool catches little more than school names.
- Great to hear
- The images by you are fantastic and great work. They're all appropriately tagged, as is the fair use logo in the infobox. The images really add a sense of place to the page that otherwise would be lost.
- Thank you very much!
This is a model article on a school district otherwise. It's almost there. Dekema, I'm putting this on hold to address the copy changes suggested above and anything else you find that would be worth a second look coming back to this after three months. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 05:56, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie: I think I'm done with the article for now, minus taking additional pictures. Do you have other suggestions? dekema (Formerly Buffaboy) (talk) 04:00, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
- Nope! I just passed it. It looks great. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:03, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review! dekema (Formerly Buffaboy) (talk) 04:48, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
- Nope! I just passed it. It looks great. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:03, 31 October 2021 (UTC)