Talk:Gimme Gimme (Inna song)/GA1

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 15:17, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 15:17, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

The phrase "the singer herself" in the lead sounds a little odd to me; it sounds more like you are forcing this to avoid repeating Inna, but I feel it would just be better to say Inna instead of this.
The phrase "encountering various things when walking through the city" seems pretty generic and can be revised to be stronger. You could do something like "exploring the city" or some variation of that.
The clip technically cannot "see" so please revise that part.
I do not believe the second quote from Celebmix in the "Composition and reception" section is entirely necessary (aka this one here "suggests a summer sound for her fifth album, especially since both 'Heaven' and 'Say It With Your Body' will be accompanying this song onto [the record]."). You can use parts of the quote, such as "a summer sound", but you can easily paraphrase the rest of the previous two releases and the upcoming album.
Please provide an ALT description for the first image in the "Music video" section. Same goes for the second image in the same section.
The quote "a couple of months" is not necessary and can easily be paraphrased.
For the phrase "acts as her second visual", I would just be more direct and say "is her second visual".
In the caption of the music video screenshot, I would say "with a man in it" as opposed to "with a male in it". Saying "male" sounds a little odd to me.
In this sentence (The male in the vehicle was predicted by Celebmix to be her love interest.), I would suggest clarifying that they predicted the man was the love interest from a teaser video. Also, I would change male to man for the same reasons as in my previous comment.
Not sure the following quote "emphasizes her sexy body" is entirely necessary and I would encourage you to paraphrase it.
Make sure to add a "Credits and personnel" section if possible.

Final comments

Overall, this article is strong. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. You have definitely piqued my interest in this singer and Alexandra Stan as well and I have to admit that I enjoy their music. They may not be the best singers in the world, but they do make fun music and that is always welcome. Aoba47 (talk) 15:44, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Aoba47: Thank you very much for the review! I've done everything apart from adding a credits section, because I don't have that many credits to add (I don't even know who exactly wrote and produced it!). I'm glad you like their music, I think it's something else from what you hear in America... Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:32, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Makes sense to me; it can be difficult to locate credits especially for more modern releases now that everything is moving to digital downloads. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 19:35, 11 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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