Talk:Great Britain at the 2010 Winter Paralympics/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 22:53, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, this article is good, albeit short. I do have a few concerns though:

"Britain will be hosting the next Paralympics when London hosts the 2012 Summer Paralympics." Department of redundancy department. Just have it say they'll host the next paralympics in london in 2012.
"Docker was competing in his third Winter Paralympics, having previously taken part in Salt Lake City and Turin, the only other British skier with previous Games experience was Farr who had also raced in Turin." should be two separate sentences.
"Representing Scotland the team had finished fifth at the 2009 World Championships but McCreadie, Malone and Killin were in the GB team which won the silver medal in the event at the 2006 Turin Games." Sounds odd as is; needs another comma in there and should be reworded.
I made a couple other prose tweaks as well.

I'll put it on hold for a couple days and pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 22:53, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review and your edits. I think I've addressed all your points, I've also added a bit of extra info on one of the skiers to lengthen the article slighty. Basement12 (T.C) 23:24, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Looks better, so the article passes. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 01:54, 21 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]