Talk:Great hammerhead/GA1

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Hi, I am reviewing this article for GA. It is a generally good article. I have a few comments regarding the prose which I am sure you can easily address. —Mattisse (Talk) 22:33, 27 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments
  • "prey items" - prey is enough, "items" is unnecessary - so I have removed "items"
  • OK
  • the cephalofoil functions to pin down stingrays, - what does "pin down" mean? I interpreted it to mean that it kept the population of stingrays down, but then in the article I see you mean literally pin down. I don't think this wording is good for the lead.
  • Changed to "immobilize"; open to other suggestions
  • "The great hammerhead was first described as Zygaena mokarran in 1837 by the German naturalist Eduard Rüppell, who changed it to Sphyrna mokarran later that year" - what is "it"
  • "It" being the name; made it explicit
  • "However, for a long time" - vague, not encyclopedic wording
  • Changed to "over 200 years"
  • "coined" - are scientific names coined?
  • In the sense that the person who describes it picks the name, yes
  • "The lectotype for this species is a male from the Red Sea." - what does this mean?
  • A lectotype is a specimen chosen after a species has already been described, to serve as the type specimen for that species - I thought it'd be distracting to explain all this in the article
  • "the ancestral condition" - unclear what this means
  • The ancestral condition is the trait exhibited by the ancestors, in this case it means the earliest hammerheads had large cephalofoils - reworded to make this clearer
  • "Its presence is uncertain off Gambia, Guinea, Mauritania, Sierra Leone," - what does this mean?
  • It's what the IUCN report says; I'd interpret it as meaning that there are large hammerheads in those regions suspected to be great hammerheads, but identification is not 100% certain - I reworded the sentence
  • "documented as moving closer to the poles in the summer" - is this both north & south poles?
  • Yes - they follow warming water in the summer, which means northward in the northern hemisphere and southward in the southern hemisphere

Hope my notes are clear! —Mattisse (Talk) 22:33, 27 April 2009 (UTC)

Addressed comments; not sure whether you wanted me to change things for some of them or not. -- Yzx (talk) 23:13, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
  • You have done a good job. —Mattisse (Talk) 23:30, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
Final GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): Clearly written b (MoS): Follows the main MoS elements
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): References are good b (citations to reliable sources): They are reliable c (OR): No OR
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): Covers major areas b (focused): Remains focused on the topic
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias: NPOV
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
  • Congratulations! Good work.

Mattisse (Talk) 23:30, 27 April 2009 (UTC)