Talk:HMS Mindful (1915)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 23:11, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will review this one, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 23:11, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The M class were an improvement on the previous L-class...: suggest either "The M class destroyers (or ships) were an improvement on those of the previous L-class..." or "The M class was..."
- Amended.
...jointly sinking the German...: having read the portion of the article that deals with this action, I think it is better to say "helped sink" rather than jointly (which I read as two ships being involved).
- Good spot.

...the greater performance was appreciated...: suggest, for greater specificity, "the greater performance of the M-class was appreciated".
- Happy to add.

...the name had been used in the Royal Navy.: I may be overthinking this, but to me it seems this should be "by the Royal Navy."
- No problem. I have amended that.
I'm pretty certain you would have included it if known, but for sake of completeness, I have to ask: is the name of the captain, or any of her captains, known?
- I have some names, but no one that seems of significance.
At 6:29 PM, the destroyer...: the construction of this section, particularly the starting sentence, suggests that this is still 30 May, but I think it may have been the following day?
- Good spot.
so did not follow Faulkner.: typo in the ship's name here.
- Another good spot.
...was sold to Cohen...: needs more context as to who/what Cohen is.
- G. Cohen is a shipbreaker. I have added the initial.

Sources themselves look OK. However, doing some source checks, I can't see that cite 12 supports the point that V48 specifically was the ship destroyed, and that the Shark was involved. The source just refers to a destroyer being sunk, not a torpedo boat. Cites 16 and 18 also checked and support the material that they are used for - however, in the case of the former I feel it may be worthwhile adding where the action took place and that the sub had already attacked a trawler.
- Well noted. The Royal Navy used the term destroyer for the German torpedo boats. I have added another reference that mentions the names of the other vessels explicitly. I have also added the detail for the action on 20 August.
Image tags check out OK
No dupe links

A nice solidly put together article otherwise. Zawed (talk) 03:32, 25 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Zawed: Thank you for your kind words and excellent review. I think I have addressed your concerns. simongraham (talk) 21:05, 26 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

This looks all good. I'm passing as GA as I believe that the article meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:45, 27 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]