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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:29, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "previous L-class destroyer, capable" destroyer overlinked.
Done.
  • "First War Construction Programme" this sounds notable, should we redlink it for an article?
None of the programmes have articles yet. This could be a nice task for someone.
  • "The destroyer was..." last destroyer you mentioned was the rumoured German one.
Thank you. I have clarified this.
  • "displacement was" capital D.
Good spot.
  • Link long tons, unusual unit.
Done.
  • "shaft horsepower" link.
Done.
  • "296 long tons" avoid starting sentence with numeral.
Reworded.
  • "torpedoes.[5]The ship" space.
Done.
Wikilinked.
  • "changed to Moresby.[8] The new name honoured" -> "changed to Moresby to honour"
Done.
  • "the Grand Fleet, joining" overlinked.

Done.

  • "in what would be the" in the.

Done.

  • "protect the battlecruisers of the Fleet" -> "of the Grand Fleet"
Done.
  • "the reconnaissance seaplane had been recovered" I missed this happening...
Sentence added.
  • "rejoined the Flotilla and" flotilla unless you use the full formal title.
Fixed.
  • "German High Seas Fleet. The two" overlinked.
Removed.
  • "after 1710 on " make it clear it's the time, i.e. 17:10 or 1710 hours or whatever MOS:TIME suggests.
Done.
  • "and at 2:15 turned" same. Is that 02:15, 2:15pm??
Done
  • "to Buncrana with" where??
Clarified.
I do not think it was not so formal then.
Changed.
  • Pennant number table, no reason to capitalise Number, and row/col scopes would be much appreciated for accessibility.
Fixed.
  • Ref 11, 12, should just be p.
Fixed.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:43, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thank you. I have amended the article. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 23:01, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]