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GA Review

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Passed. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 13:41, 1 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 10:21, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 10:21, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Prelim

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  • British Empire, beam, and Kilowatt are duplicated links
    • Removed
  • Article is stable
  • Image correctly licensed
  • Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

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  • "First-class" doesn't need a capital
    • Removed.
  • Ibid "Admirals"
    • Removed.
  • You're linking the wrong Michael de Courcy; this one died thirty years before Pylades was launched
    • Well noted. This one also seems not have achieved the rank of Admiral so I have amended the text.
  • "led to the"
    • Added.
  • Flag in class operators section is unnecessary
    • Removed.
  • "1267" needs a comma
    • Added. And to other instances of similar numbers.
  • Length between perpendiculars differs between main text and infobox
    • Corrected.

Design and development

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  • Link Royal Navy at first mention of "navy"
    • Added.
  • "Pylades-class" no need for hyphen
    • Removed.
  • bm needs linking
    • Added.
  • You repeat "The engines", but there's only one?
    • Corrected and reworded to avoid the repeat.
  • Link broadside
    • Added.
  • Be consistent with numbers - you use "Ten" but "20"

Construction and career

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  • at Sheerness Dockyard
    • Changed.
  • for machinery
    • Changed.
  • "after disappearing 18 days beforehand" this sounds interesting, do we have any more context?
    • Unfortunately the report has limited detail.
  • "was the last Royal Navy to be deployed" missing word
    • Added.
  • Pylades serving on three distinct stations in an eight month period is a little strange. Do we know what she was doing/why she was moving?
    • The sources do not seem to say. Reading between the lines it seems that the vessel required repair more frequently.
  • "with much the copper" missing word
    • Added.
  • "on 13 January" missing year
    • Added.
  • "the vessel paid" sp
    • Corrected.
  • I know nothing about the Chesapeake affair, but considering you describe Pylades as having a "critical role" in stopping "the altercation"(?) and as such preventing the UK from joining the ACW, I think more than two sentences could be devoted to expanding on this
    • The source does not go into a lot of detail but I have added some context that I hope helps the reader. The sentence is linked to the wikipedia article that does give more information on the affair (although it does not currently mention the corvette's role) so I hope that suffices.
  • "Buckey Point" sp
    • Amended.

References

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  • BWAS 1793–1817 isn't a 2014 publication, nor does it include any mention of Pylades. Assume you mean Winfield, Rif (2014). British Warships in the Age of Sail 1817–1863: Design, Construction, Careers and Fates. Barnsley, South Yorkshire: Seaforth. ISBN 978-1-84832-169-4.
    • You are exactly right. Fixed.

@Simongraham: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await your replies. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:48, 29 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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