Talk:Hannah Banana/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: — Legolas ^(talk2me) 15:56, 7 December 2010 (UTC)

Hi all I will be doing the review for the article. First I am checking it against the quick-fail criteria. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 17:27, 8 December 2010 (UTC)

There are some redirect links in the article. Can you fix them? No dab links. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 15:44, 9 December 2010 (UTC)

Done. The IGN reference is unfixable, but I fixed the other two. Gage (talk) 06:21, 10 December 2010 (UTC)

Review almost done, will come up by tonight. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:53, 13 December 2010 (UTC)

Actual review

Lead

• and many cultural references --> Suggest different cultural refrences
  • Not sure what you mean by this. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
    • Many cultural references is a wrong usage. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:02, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
      • I'm still unsure how this should be ammended. Do you have any suggestions? Gage (talk) 06:36, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
        • The line "and many cultural references" it self is wrong. When culture is used, it is implicit that it will many, however, it may or may not be different. Hence, here it refers to the different references from modern pop culture. So, using "many" is frowned, rather than using "different". Because it is not actually many cultures, it is the same pop culture from where you list the references, but albeit different persons from the culture. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:49, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
        • I've removed the use of the word "many." Gage (talk) 07:29, 17 December 2010 (UTC)

• The second para of the section uses a number of consecutive sentences starting with "The episode". Please consider rephrasing.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)

Plot

• Stewie notices something strange about Miley when he notices feedback coming from her cell phone. --> consecutive usage of notices, change.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
• Lois's --> Lois'
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)

production

• In commenting on the original development --> remove In
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
• Cyrus's fans --> Cyrus' fans
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
• as she is a fan herself, and "was very --> Chop it up, "She added that she is a fan herself, and "was "
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)

Cultural

• Replace File:Kanyewestdec2008.jpg, as ideally images should look towards the article, not away from it.
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
• The section looks fine.

REception

• Perfect

Referencs

• Try wikilinking some of the work and publishers, like The New York Times, The A.V. Club, 20th Century Fox etc
  • Done. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)

EL

• The succession table is really unnecessary as the infobox itself has the succession. Please remove.
  • No. Gage (talk) 00:22, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
    • Please be more explanatory, those curt replies really don't shine much. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:02, 17 December 2010 (UTC)
      • Sorry, I thought you were referring to something else. Done. Gage (talk) 06:36, 17 December 2010 (UTC)

Nothing much to do. If the issues are addressed, I will pass the article to . Onhold for seven days. Good job. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:53, 16 December 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the changes, because I have gone ahead and put the article as a GA. — Legolas ^(talk2me) 14:59, 17 December 2010 (UTC)