Talk:Henry W. Maxwell Memorial/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 05:08, 6 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I've taken a look at this, comments as follows:

Biography

he ~~would grow up to become~~ was a successful businessman
- Changed.
Maxwell and Graves Bank just checking, this is not meant to be Maxwell & Graves Bank?'
- Possibly, but I used the spelling that's used in the cited reference.
the parks commissioner in 1884. maybe clarify if this is Brooklyn's or New York's parks commissioner?
- Done.

Memorial

...to sculpt a memorial plaque. because the usage of "sculpt" follows quite closely from "sculptor", suggest replacing it with create or similar
- Changed to create.
suggest moving the link on "city of New York" to its first usage, in the bio section.
- The usage of "New York" in the bio refers to the state, as Brooklyn at the time was its own city and not a borough of New York City. Added link to "New York (state)" there.
Suggest breaking the second paragraph after the mention of its unveiling. This then separates the change in location into its own paragraph, which is a different topic. Ditto at the point where vandalism is mentioned. I note that if you prefer to not break it at this point, then the refs can be consolidated since all the content of the 2nd paragraph after note 4, is covered by note 1.
- Split the second paragraph into two paragraphs, with one pertaining to creation and dedication and the other pertaining to later history. Consolidated references as well.
The memorial was moved to its current location, Grand Army Plaza, near the intersection...
- Done.

Design

Looks good.

See also

I feel 1903 in art is so broad a subject that it is not helpful as a "see also". For example, if an article covered it, a list of other works by Augustus Saint-Gaudens would be more relevant.
- Removed see also section.

Lead

Suggest a slight expansion to the lead to mention its original location and date it was moved.
- Done.

Image

My knowledge of tags for images is not crash hot, but I think you might need another PD tag for the sculpture itself.
- Not entirely sure about that either, but I can read more about the process and make appropriate changes on Wikimedia Commons if applicable.

A nice tidy article, only a few issues to nitpick. Will check back in a few days if not pinged prior. Zawed (talk) 05:08, 6 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Zawed, just pinging to let you know I addressed the above points and that if there are any more issues I should address, please let me know. Thanks! -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:24, 6 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

JJonahJackalope, this looks good. I discovered a more suitable "See also" topic so took the liberty of adding it. If you disagree, feel free to remove it. I'm pretty certain it will be PD (life of author plus 70 years), but it will probably pay to have a further look at the tags on that image. I am happy to pass this as GA in the meantime as I believe it meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 03:16, 7 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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