Talk:Here We Go Again (Demi Lovato album)/GA1

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 16:46, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from AJona1992

File:Demi Lovato - Got Dynamite.ogg and File:Remember December.ogg needs a "further rational" section. Look at File:Mariah Carey - We Belong Together.ogg, File:Amor Prohibido.ogg and File:Selena-I Could Fall In Love lyrics.ogg.

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Seems like this article may not be stable [1], however, there are editors who revert vandalism.
According to this report there are two WP:DABs on the article, please fix.

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According to this report there is a WP:DEADLINK on this article, please replace or fix.

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I was very impressed with the way the lead presented itself, very well written.
The whole Background is not stable at all, first we learn about Lovato's earlier career beginnings, maintaining moderate success on Camp Rock, trying to break out of stereotypes, releasing her debut album... This section has undue weight with her debut album, why do readers need to know that her debut album peaked on the Billboard 200 and that several songs were not as successful?

Removed a few things. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink John Mayer-ish

It is linked. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

This sentence "World of Chances", the first song she wrote with Mayer, was the only to make the album's final cut I believe is missing a word, or a word needs to be removed.

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This sentence Lovato also collaborated with The Academy Is... lead singer William Beckett on a song titled "For the Love of a Daughter". We already know who is Beckett, so why continuously add that he was from The Academy Is...? and that he is the lead singer? Just use his last name per WP:MOSBIO#First mention

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""Stop the World", was co-written by Lovato and Nick Jonas" why is Nick Jonas' name presented as "Nick Jonas" if in the previous section we learn that he is from Jonas Brothers?

Because it could be any of the Jonas Brothers if one hasn't read the "Development" section. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

""World of Chances", with John Mayer." Per above?

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In "Commercial performance" remove "of availability"

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Per WP:ORDINAL "at number forty" ---> "at number 40"

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Per WP:ORDINAL "debuted at number forty-five on the Top 100 Mexico and reached its peak position of twenty-five" ---> "debuted at number 45 on the Top 100 Mexico and reached its peak position of 25"

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This sentence "Across Europe, the album debuted at number thirty-six in Greece and later reached number five" ---> "Across Europe, the album debuted at number 36 in Greece and later peaked at number five"

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This sentence "In Spain, the album spent thirteen weeks on the chart and peaked at number thirty-five" ---> "In Spain, Here We Go Again spent thirteen weeks on the chart and peaked at number 35

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In "Promotion" this sentence "Radio Disney presented the world premiere of the album on" ---> "Radio Disney presented the world premiere of Here We Go Again ..."

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Wikilink "hook and chorus"

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Why start it out with "The album track,"?

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Track listing needs a source (FN#15 would work)

I don't think it does. I've never seen a track listing with a source before. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"Recording locations" is not needed, consider removing them.

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When did the album peak at number one on the Billboard 200? The article body does not speak of it until the "Charts" section. This seems unbalanced.

I'm not following you here. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

FN#7's title ("Demi Lovato Certifications") seems to be made-up. It's "Here We Go Again > RIAA certification"

The page doesn't have a title. "Demi Lovato Certifications" is fine. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

FN#15 "[booklet]" is supposed to be "[CD]"

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FN#31 ""Year End Chart 2009 – The Billboard 200"" needs to be ""Year End Chart 2009 – The Billboard 200""

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FN#41 is in Japanese and needs to be presented as such (such as FN#58)

I don't see what you mean. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

FN#50 publisher? be consistent in weather or not you provide publishers for newspapers/websites

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FN#55 wikilink iTunes Store and Apple Inc.

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What makes this a reliable source? this?, this?, this?, this? and this?

Amazon.com simply is reliable. It's the world's largest online retailer. Pancake (talk) 17:32, 18 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: Amazon is as you say a retailer. That fact does not make it a WP:RS. This comes up at WP:RSN frequently and consensus is that it is not an independent source and that in fact release dates and other such information on Amazon is frequently wrong. Please find other sources. And please do not quote WP:OTHERSTUFFEXISTS. Jezhotwells (talk) 15:12, 19 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I have replaced the Amazon refs, apart from one which is used to source the release date of the first single. It has been removed from iTunes and other sources, Amazon is the only place that still got it. And I have not cited Otherstuffexists. Pancake (talk) 19:22, 21 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

We never said anything about iTunes, Amazon.com is an unreliable source. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 00:37, 22 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

That's not what I meant. The first single has been removed from iTunes and other sources. It's only available on Amazon. Pancake (talk) 10:37, 22 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Since the unreliable sources have been replaced with reliable ones I will now pass the article. Best and happy holidays, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 18:45, 26 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]