Talk:Hollensbury Spite House/GA1
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 07:15, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
This looks an interesting article. I will review in due course. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 07:15, 6 June 2022 (UTC)
- Awesome, thanks for taking the time to review. APK whisper in my ear 03:36, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
This looks pretty good, a few editorial suggestions:
- Lead: "other possibilities. The other stories involve a dispute with his neighbor and the second as a gift...": Not crazy on the wording here, suggest: "other possibilities, the first being due to dispute with his neighbor and the second as a gift..."
- Original owner and construction: "The first story is the one that is most often told.": I think this sentence is redundant as it is already established it is the best known of the stories.
- Original owner and construction: "The neighbor's house at 521 Queen Street...": Structurally, because of the content of the sentences of the remainder of this paragraph, I think this sentence should start a new paragraph.
- Later history: I feel of this could a little tightened up to reduce emphasis on Sammis and his wife, e.g. the mention of their holiday houses doesn't seem relevant to me. The main point is the Spite house and how it is/was used.
- Is it known that Sammis is still the owner? The sources that discuss him all appear to date to 2006–2008 but the relevant sections of the article is written in present tense. It might pay to recast some sentences, e.g. In 2008, Colleen Sammis said... As of 2008, the couple used the house
- Image tags check out.
- Source checks: #1, #2, #5 and #16 all check out.
That's what what I have picked up for now. Zawed (talk) 23:45, 11 June 2022 (UTC)
- Ok, thanks. I made the suggested edits. According to local government info, they are still the owners. Do you think it should still be reworded? I added the "As of 2008" part. APK whisper in my ear 06:47, 14 June 2022 (UTC)
- The changes look fine and I am happy to pass this as GA as I believe the article meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 10:38, 18 June 2022 (UTC)