Talk:Hugh of Fauquembergues/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 15:18, 20 February 2018 (UTC)

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:18, 20 February 2018 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y (0.0% is highest.) 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No Dead links Y
• Images appropriately licensed Y

Prose Suggestions

Lede

• Baldwin I of Jerusalem granted him Galilee after its first prince, Tancred, who was Baldwin's opponent, suggest Baldwin I of Jerusalem granted him Galilee after its first prince, Tancred, who was a rival of Baldwin,
• against Toghtekin, Atabeg of Damascus. suggest against Toghtekin, the Atabeg of Damascus.

Early life

• but their conflict was soon resolved. suggest but their conflict was soon made unnecesary.

Prince of Galilee

• However, the battle was not lost, because the king made a surprise attack against the Egyptians and defeated them. suggest However, they were not beaten, because the king made a surprise attack against the Egyptians and defeated them.
• That is all of my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:34, 21 February 2018 (UTC)
  • @Iazyges:, thank you for your review and assessment. Sorry, I do not understand your above remarks. Do you suggest that the article should be modified? Borsoka (talk) 04:39, 22 February 2018 (UTC)

    @Borsoka: No problem. I am suggesting the text that comes first be changed into the text after "suggest". Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:47, 22 February 2018 (UTC)