Talk:Hurricane Caroline/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: CycloneIsaac (talk · contribs) 21:41, 27 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing later.—CycloneIsaac–E-Mail 21:41, 27 February 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Don't use "However".
- Unless it's overused, there is no problem with using that word. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 00:30, 2 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  - I agree with YE Secret ^account 01:37, 4 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Met. history

"The disturbance then became Tropical Depression Five as it neared northeastern Cuba and southeastern Bahamas." When?
- Article already mentions it. Secret ^account 01:37, 4 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Caroline's forward speed slowed down to 5 mph (8 km/h) while intensifying and on the same day, Caroline was upgraded to hurricane status." I think you can spell out 5 mph...
- Not fixed, common practice on Wikiproject articles?
"two hurricane hunter aircraft flew" Grammar issue?
I think you should mention when Caroline became a Category 3 hurricane.
- Article already mentions it Secret ^account 01:37, 4 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Preparations and Impact

"Caroline also produced storm tides 1–4 feet (0.3-1.2 m) above normal along coastal sections of southern Texas. Overall damage in southern Texas was minor, and there were two indirect fatalities due to drowning incidents in Galveston, Texas." Cite this please.
"However, the rains broke an eight month drought that was affecting inland areas of northern Mexico that was affecting the area's corn production." Another use of however.

References

American Meteorological Society's website is in maintenance currently, checking again later.
I think you only need to link AP once the the references section.
A few Google news sources don't match its actual title...

Make sure you fix all problems from previous reviews, if there are any.—CycloneIsaac–E-Mail 00:02, 2 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Other issues

Hello Secret and CycloneIsaac, I have a few more thing to add to this review.--12george1 (talk) 01:02, 2 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Hurricane Caroline was a Category 3 hurricane during the 1975 Atlantic hurricane season. It was one of two tropical cyclones to affect northern Mexico during the 1975 Atlantic hurricane season." - You should probably merge these two together and not spell out the 1975 Atlantic hurricane season (don't link it twice either). My suggestion would be: "Hurricane Caroline was a Category 3 hurricane and one of two tropical cyclones to affect northern Mexico during the 1975 Atlantic hurricane season."
The impact in the lede is a bit lackluster. There are some ways to fix this. For example, you could be more specific on how those two indirect deaths occurred (drowning) and where (Galveston). If I didn't read past the lede, I might think nothing happened in Mexico, so elaborate there too.
"Two NOAA Research planes conducted experiments" - Make sure you state what NOAA stands for. So do something like these "Two National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration (NOAA) Research planes conducted experiments"
Most of the references have specific dates. Format the dates to follow the pattern of the accessdate. For example, the date for reference #5 should be 1975-08-29.
On references #1 and #3, change the |author= parameters to |work=. Next, change "NOAA" to "National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration". The titles for both also need to be fixed. Change "NHC Report on Caroline" to "Preliminary Report Hurricane Caroline August 24 - September 1"
For the newspaper references, change the type of citation to: cite news. The |author= parameters should be changed to |agency=. Then |publisher= should be changed to |newspaper=.
On reference #9, "Hydrometeorological Prediction Center" should be "Weather Prediction Center"
- Fixed everything else thanks. Secret ^account 01:37, 4 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]