Talk:Hurricane Flossie (2007)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Hurricane Flossie brought squally weather and minimal damage to the Hawaiian Islands during August 2007" can you find something more intresting than this? Don't tell me that every EPAC article has this opener, because they don't. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
- It's fine as is. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" After traversing the tropical Atlantic, the wave crossed Central America and entered the eastern Pacific on August 1." how is this important for the lead? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Uhm...because it tells you what happened to the wave between the time it departed Africa and developed into a tropical depression in the eastern Pacific? It didn't magically poof from one basin to the other lol. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
You should mention it was slow to weaken at first, then mention the date its weakening accelerated. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I'm sure that's concluded from reading the MH. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Add more impact and preps to the lead. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Why don't you use the TWO archives for the origins? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Why is it needed? The characteristics of the wave are already mentioned in the lede (poorly-defined) and we already know it moved off the coast of Africa and crossed Central America.
Give a distance from BCS or Hawaii somewhere in the MH. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- ??? "At this time, the depression was situated roughly 1,700 mi (2,700 km) east-southeast of the Big Island of Hawaii." TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"ensued as the storm entered the Central Pacific Hurricane Center's area of responsibility that morning" wikilink to CPHC and mention it corssed 140W as well. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Linked CPHC and AOR. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:20, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"remained a Category 4 hurricane by 36 continuous hours.[1]" to "remained a Category 4 hurricane for 36 hours" . YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Heavy rainfall and flooding were expected to be the primary concern; as such, flash flood watches were issued and " wikilink to flash flood. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" forcing a n estimated 26,000 college students to remain home." space issue here. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Elsewhere, 1 to 3 inches (25 to 76 mm) of precipitation fell at Maui, and 2 to 4 inches (51 to 100 mm) fell at the Koolau Range on Oahu, although no significant winds or flooding was reported." abbrivate units. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The most significant waves were estimated at 20 feet (6.1 m) in height, while sustained winds of at least 39 miles per hour (63 km/h) were reported at South Point. " same here. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Check for anything in List of Hawaii hurricanes for more info, in addition the below. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
- Nothing important. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Here for more info. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
- Nothing. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
here may have some stuff as well. I'd mention Erick also passed south of the island in the start of the month. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:07, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- All information from that article has been used already. And Why? TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Add Hurricane Felicia (2009) and Hurricane Jimena (2003) to see also. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:18, 28 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]