Talk:Hurricane Greg (1999)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 21:46, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Since I've reviewed your other two GAN's, might as well do this one, given the upcoming backlog. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 21:46, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

"Hurricane Greg was the only tropical cyclone in 1999 to make a direct landfall" in the world? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" The disturbance traversed southern Mexico before emerging offshore, where it began to interact with a broad area of low pressure that had existed in the eastern Pacific for several days prior." no need for "had". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"That night, a large mass of extremely deep convection developed near the center,[4] in spite of banding features that had all but dissipated.[5] " I'd flip this setnece around as the use of "in spite" and "had" is weird here, given it's not a contradiction. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Radar out of Los Cabos indicated an eye was in the process of forming by early on September 6, and Greg was upgraded to a Category 1 hurricane in conjunction with satellite intensity estimates by 18:00 UTC that day." missing a "that" before "an eye". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" before succumbing to the unfavorable environment and dissipating a day later west of Baja California." "Baja California" is the northern portion of the penisula. Change to "Baja California Sur". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Preparations and impact" add aftermath to the header. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Following Greg's formation, a tropical storm warning was issued for the coast of Mexico from Manzanillo to Cabo Corrientes, including Islas Marías. " wikilink tropical cyclone warnings and watches. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"6, a tropical storm warning was issued for locations south of La Paz on the east coast of Baja California, while a" see above coment, the NHC is wrong here. Also please delink "Baja California". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Gas stations were filled with lines up to 0.5 mi (880 yd) long." convert to meters in this case. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"A state of emergency was declared in six states.[20] " link to state of emergency. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
More impact: 1, 2, 3. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Remove links to Pacific hurricane and List of tropical cyclones in the see also. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Add October 1999 Mexico floods to the see also. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Ref #14 and #19: Make sure the AP is the agency field. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, it's good. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:19, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I think I fixed all of the above. Thanks as usual. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 23:16, 28 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]