Talk:Hurricane Leslie (2012)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 16:41, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "The twelfth tropical cyclone and twelfth named storm" - get rid of one

• Went with the former, since it equaled the latter and it would probably be best to have the link for tropical cyclone in there.--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "caused hundreds of power outages and felled tree branches" - unclear whether "felled" is an adjective or a verb. I'd use "knocked down" so it's clearer, given the rest of the sentence.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• " caused Leslie to re-curve to the west-northwest" - recurve usually means moving to the northeast, so I don't think it works here.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "However, intensification halted later on August 31, as wind shear increased over the storm - rm comma

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "with the circulation being displaced " - rm "being"

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "Relentless caused Leslie" - did it?

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• 5 mph (8.0 km/h)" - unit?

• What about it?--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "the storm's circulation expanded to a radius of more than 1,150 miles (1,850 km); the wind field also expanded" - the difference between circulation and wind field is ambiguous

• Not sure how to fix that--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "By early on September 9, the blocking pattern diminished" - how?

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• " than initially predicted, causing less than anticipated impact."

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• Impact in Nova Scotia?

• Let me look into that. There was up to 6.5 inches of rain in Nova Scotia, so you would probably be right about impact there.--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

All in all pretty good. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:41, 27 February 2013 (UTC)