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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 05:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)
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I'll review this today --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Recording date is unsourced
- "For the 1983 song," → "For the Mary Wells song,"
- "Meghan Trainor to promote the film" → "Meghan Trainor, for promotion of the film"
- "Martin Renea co-wrote it, and co-produced it with" → "Martin Renea co-wrote and co-produced the song, alongside"
- This wording gave the idea that the Monsters and the Strangerz were involved in the songwriting too, so I tweaked it a bit.
- "Epic Records released it as a single" → "Epic Records released the song for digital download and streaming as a single" with the appropriate targets
- "percussion-heavy instrumentation, "I'm a Lady" is a" → "percussion-heavy instrumentation, it is a"
- "song that has lyrics about" → "song, with the lyrics discussing"
- "It received mostly positive reviews from music critics" → "The song received mostly positive reviews from music critics" with the target and add what was praised
- "charted at number 40 on the US Adult Top 40 chart and 300 on the Russia Airplay chart" → "reached number 40 and 300 on the US Adult Top 40 and Russia Airplay charts, respectively, in 2017" with the target
- "directed the music video," → "directed an accompanying music video,"
- "2017, and features only" → "2017. The video features solely"
- "in settings such as a boardroom, wearing" → "who are seen in a boardroom, wearing"
- "shooting archery and lifting weights" → "shooting archery, and lifting weights"
- "Trainor has performed "I'm a Lady" live" → "In 2017, Trainor performed the song live"
Background and release
[edit]- "In October 2015, Meghan Trainor" → "In October 2015, Trainor"
- Add releae year of The Peanuts Movie soundtrack in brackets
- "contributed another track called "Good to be Alive" to its" → "recorded another track entitled "Good to be Alive" for the"
- "with The Monsters and the Strangerz" → "with the Monsters and the Strangerz"
- "announced that she had written the song for the film Smurfs: The Lost Village (2017) at the 2016 KIIS-FM Jingle Ball, describing it" → "announced at the 2016 KIIS-FM Jingle Ball that she had written the song for the film Smurfs: The Lost Village (2017), describing the song"
- "fire'" and an" → "fire'", and called it an"
- Wikilink upbeat to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
- The last sentence of this para provides irrelevant information to this section; add the Friday release date announcement here instead but move the stills info to Music video; try something in this section like "Weeks prior to its release, Trainor had announced the song for release on..."
- "was edited by her brother" → "was edited by Meghan's brother"
- "released as a single for digital download and streaming" → "released for digital download and streaming as a single by Epic Records"
- "on February 27 and 28," → "on February 27 and February 28, 2017,"
- I have a general rule of thumb that the year should only be mentioned once in a section per month, since more than that makes it look a bit cluttered.
- ""I'm a Lady" led to Trainor" → ""I'm a Lady" being used for promotion of Smurfs: The Lost Village led to Meghan Trainor"
- "was released on" → "was ultimately released on"
- "and did not include the song" → "with it not including the song"
Composition
[edit]- Retitle to Composition and lyrics
- "of "I'm a Lady"'s" → "of the song's" on the audio sample text
- The prose of this section should start with the last sentence instead
- The penultimate sentence should be the second instead in the new order
- "has empowering lyrics" → "features empowering lyrics"
- "Its pre-chorus" → "The pre-chorus" with the appropriate wikilink
- "with its chorus" → "with the chorus of the song" with the target
- "Both sections repeat a few times" → "Both sections are repeated a few times"
- ""I'm a Lady" has a positive message and percussion-heavy instrumentation," → ""I'm a Lady" includes percussion-heavy instrumentation and has a positive message,"
- Target spoken to Spoken word
- "noted to be reminiscent to her" → "noted to be reminiscent of her"
Critical reception
[edit]- Maybe retitle this to Reception and mention the two chart positions in this section since they are written in the lead?
- "by some critics" → "by some music critics"
- "and its beat is one that" → "and said its beat is one that"
- Target feminist to Feminism
- "for the singer, and" → "for Trainor, and"
- "She additionally criticized Trainor" → "Cauterucci additionally criticized Trainor"
- "each other with the lyric" → "each other with the lyrics,"
- "It received a nomination" → "The song received a nomination"
Music video
[edit]- Wikilink music video to itself
- "sees Trainor performing with a band" → "begins with Trainor performing alongside a band"
- "scenes of women succeeding" → "scenes of women achieving success"
- "walks of life, including:" → "walks of life, including;"
- "shooting archery and lifting weights" → "shooting archery, and lifting weights"
- "Outfits worn by Trainor" → "Outfits worn by Trainor for the visual"
- "was described by Roth as "women can" → "was described by Roth as conveying the message that women "can"
- Merge the second para with the first since it is only three sentences
- "in the video, and it" → "in the music video, and said it"
- "and do what they want." → "and do what they want"."
- "constituting the" → "noting that she employs the"
- "empowerment" with Trainor modeling" → "empowerment", commenting that Trainor models"
- "and positively compared it" → "while positively comparing them"
Live performance
[edit]- Merge with the above section as the bottom para since it is only two lines and retitle the above to Music video and live performance
- "performed "I'm a Lady" on" → "performed "I'm a Lady" for"
- Target Today to Today (American TV program)
- "This marked her first performance" → "This marked Trainor's first performance"
- "and being on vocal rest" → "and taking a vocal rest"
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Should Trainor be credited as lead vocals or vocals?
Charts
[edit]- Weekly chart positions for "I'm a Lady" → Weekly chart performance for "I'm a Lady"
- Positions seems a bit more accurate? Chart performance would imply we are covering the song's entire chart run in the table, when it's just peak positions.
- Kind of understand what you mean, retitled to Chart performance for "I'm a Lady" as this is how you should do for tables where the weekly charts are the only one. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:40, 5 July 2020 (UTC)
Release history
[edit]- The cols should not be sortable
- Center the refs
References
[edit]- Well done on having them ready and archived!
- Copyvio score looks good at 20.6%
- Remove ref 5's wikilink since this is her article, per WP:OVERLINK
- Change ref 6 to citing Apple Music for all since that is what the URLs lead to, while have the wikilink solely on the US citation
- Remove wikilink on Apple Music for ref 10
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold since you have done a good job generally, but the article needs a few fixes before it becomes a GA. --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:41, 5 July 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks a lot for the review, Kyle! I made all of the changes and left justifications for the very few I chose not to.--NØ 09:45, 5 July 2020 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass, after some copy editing from me; good job on the quick response though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:40, 5 July 2020 (UTC)