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GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:37, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Infobox

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  • You can remove the following unnecessary infobox parameters:
  • "Cover"
  • "Alt"
  • "Caption"
  • Unlink "Alan Menken" from the "Producer" parameter since you already linked him above in the "Writer" parameter

Lead

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Paragraph 1

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  • Since Cheryl Freeman is the only other credited musician as the artist(s) of the song, I would list her first after "while singers..."

Paragraph 2

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  • The correct wording is "Motown", not "Mowtown"

Paragraph 3

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  • Link "music critics" to the article "Music journalism" please

Background and context

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Paragraph 1

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  • Remove the extra space after "literal" please
  • That last sentence is way long; perhaps you could remove "featuring lyrics that Meg herself would never have sung," for the same effect?

Paragraph 2

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  • Again, since Cheryl Freeman is the only other credited musician as the artist(s) of the song, I would list her first after "Familiar with..."
Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 19:59, 16 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add "musicians" after "Familiar with" please
  • Done, but substituted "musicians" for "singers"; hope that's okay.

Paragraph 3

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  • American English: Change "realisation" --> "realization"
  • Done.

Music and lyrics

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Paragraph 2

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  • The link to "Parody" through "parodies" is unnecessary; please remove it

Reception

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  • Link "music critics" and "film critics" here in the lead sentence please to the aforementioned articles
  • Done.
  • Irving Tan's review is very, very long; please trim here and there
  • Done; removed "which has gotten uncomfortably crass and increasingly unsubtle over the years" and "for that swooning female friend in your life..."
  • Since the list listed also acts as the title, it would be correct to capitalize the statement as "The Best Ever Disney Songs"

Cover versions

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  • All good! Great work
  • Thanks!
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  • Alphabetize the categories please; the only ones out of place are "Disney's Hercules" and "Love themes"

End of GA Review:

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Very well-written articles with minor issues. Seven days for changes to be made ("on hold"); good luck! Thanks! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 22:15, 14 June 2016 (UTC).[reply]